Follow the basic

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I had to draw single lesson from Great Ashoka’s episode He had no hesitation in leaving even if highly rode The fame and prosperity was earned out of bloodshed This continuously hunted him and forced to lead for true religion

Follow the basic

I imagined the sky to be hollow

I forced my thoughts to go slow

It was an ordinary day to think

It was all the way bad for me to sink

 

I looked pale and surrendered to logic

It was suggesting me to follow the basic

At no stage I had some fear and apprehensions

Life seemed to me useless and full of questions

 

What sky had to offer to me in general?

Except its blue horizon and endless zone in particular

I took it as source of inspiration

In its hollowness there appeared to be self revelation

 

What transpired in my mind to go for solution?

Was some change expected for possible revolution?

I thought of The Great Ashoka who left the whole empire

Even today whole world takes note of his contribution and admire

 

It is said he witn3essed the mass destruction and slaughter

There was complete victory but nothing to enjoy after

He had victory on field but loss at heart

This was turning point for his good start

 

Sometimes we are winning in field but loosing at home

You are praised alright but never get rousing welcome

People are bitter about your highhandedness

Lots of criticism and adverse comments are there to f ace

 

Yes such attitude troubled me for long duration

I had everything but lacked proper satisfaction

Something was really absent to feel enjoyment

Some good thing was taking shape with solid movement

 

In life material gain or achievement is not that important

The progress may be there and remain constant

Yet something is worrying you most of the day

You think much but it is driving you away

 

I had to draw single lesson from Great Ashoka’s episode

He had no hesitation in leaving even if highly rode

The fame and prosperity was earned out of bloodshed

This continuously hunted him and forced to lead for true religion

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jadia4708au commented on Follow the basic

03-31-2011

Comment by Debra Ann Gray-Elliott 8 hours ago Delete Comment Very nice!

jadia4708au commented on Follow the basic

03-31-2011

Re: Follow the basic (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Thursday, March 31, 2011 (10:21:00) A few grammatical fix-er-up'ers here but otherwise a solid work. Reminds me quite a bit of Ecclesiastes "All is vanity." -- desires of this world and of the flesh certainly pass with time and age, the body withers and we eventually die - but the desires of the spirit live onward no matter the age or whether we still physically exist or not. Very good point, poet, and well presented. j.p.

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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