When I am with you...

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    • rachelerika
    • If you get a minute may you please check out my poem? http://www.originalpoetry.com/you-are-my-happily-ever-after

    When I am with you...

     when i am with you the howl of icy winds
    becomes the sound of crashing waves
    when i am wiith you the stormy dark rainclouds
    became a sweet summers day
    when i am with you in a world that needs more love
    i find myself craddled in your arms
    when i am without you i miss you with all my heart

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    JadedJezzabel commented on When I am with you...

    07-28-2010

    love the contrasting words you chose for this piece.......precious and few they are, the ones who make us feel this way
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    rachelerika

    07/29/2010

    Thankyou kindly x

    dahlusion commented on When I am with you...

    07-27-2010

    beautifully composed and delivered and oh, so, sexy and alive with passion...peace and light, dah
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    rachelerika

    07/29/2010

    Thanks hun x

    HarverTomsson commented on When I am with you...

    12-06-2009

    I sense this is a thrice-spoken illustration of contrast. I'm sure it is due to the fact I speak American and not strictly, English, that I took three reads to sense this. My second line would have read something like: becomes the rhythmic murmer echoing off a warm surf." Unless, of course, I wanted to be coy and ambiguous at the start of it all.
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    rachelerika

    12/07/2009

    A compliment? I am a kiwi living in Scotland ... I wrote this poem years ago... but thanks for your input

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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