throe

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    this poem came out of two very traumatic events. when i was 10 years old, i watched my home burn down. this was the greatest pain i knew, up to that point. much later in life, my girlfriend, of 2 years left the relationship without much of an explanation. the break up was devastating. "throe", is a combination of a house on fire and a broken heart. it's a literal poem...not too deep, just dark and painful.

    throe



    this burned out house
    burned to the ground
    scarred, charred and fallen down
    floors stained by acid tears
    one day became two bad years
    this house was grand but broke like glass
    we cut our hearts and bled in the grass
    like bittersweet we choked the garden
    the soil grew cruel and began to harden
    you were the fire
    but i am in flames
    this burned out home it has my name
    i used a house as my motif
    and touched upon disturbing grief

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    EyesOfRain commented on throe

    09-06-2012

    The ravaging emotions here are chilling. Not in a cold empty kind of way, but that warm tingly chill that clings to the inside of your bones and gives you goosbumps. The introduction is vital to this piece, for it brought everything together in a cacophony of destruction. Very well written. On a personal level, I'm sorry you had to experience the losses that inspired this piece.
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    purdylox commented on throe

    11-10-2010

    you have flow and talent that I envy wow I am so glad I found you on this site your are great and I love this poem, its moving and pulled at my heart strings, I felt the breaking of the heart and the heat of the flames. highly looking forward to reading more
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    Crush

    11/10/2010

    this is one of my faves. thank you for your time and for spending so much energy and good feelings my way. i really really appreciate that.

    hjaycarney commented on throe

    04-29-2010

    at times our lives burn up in smoke and crumble to the ground and it is only with the greatest of character and inner strength that we rise from the ashes. that we pull our lives back together, and some, our will to survive enables us to go on.
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    Crush

    05/31/2010

    so very true ! thanks for your time !

    stellar commented on throe

    10-24-2009

    This is poem is so powerful....The imagery lined in powerful words..make this outstanding,,,thanks for sharig
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    Crush

    10/26/2009

    losing my home to a huge fire stays with me. that fire was the greatest pain i knew until years later when i lost my girl in a horrible break up. i combined two very painful experiences. what you read here is a culmination of two worlds coliding in grief. thank you.

    alexm0193 commented on throe

    10-12-2009

    great composition, great language, great rhythm, and amazing style. good job my friend.
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    Crush

    10/14/2009

    thank you for your attention to my words. i really appreciate your time.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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