lauren

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  • Loss Of A Girlfriend

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    the loss of a friend is among the greatest grief

    lauren


    on the news
    they flashed her smiling grace
    at that very moment
    tears rushed down my face
    the media showed her photos
    the happy ever after
    the promised but failed fruition
    not the longing in her laughter

    she was a song
    sung sweet or strong
    she was a lovely dance

    when she walked by
    she left water-coloured images
    in your mind's eye
    but like everything beautiful, she could break
    her multi-layered wings burned too close to the sun
    she fell from the sky and was strangled by a lake

    my eyes will stay damp with tears
    but i will celebrate her life
    for the rest of my years


    i miss you, lauren

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    gmcookie commented on lauren

    12-31-2010

    What can be said? Life is sometimes not just. But then again, it never pretends to be. The loss of a friend leaves a wound that never really heals over. But we owe it to the departed to keep on pushin' and bring meaning to this unjust planet.
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    Crush

    12/31/2010

    thank you .

    jademelissa74 commented on lauren

    10-14-2010

    Crush, I havent' been around the site in quite a while. I am truly sorry to be made aware of such news, especially through a well-offered poem. The piercing feeling is raw, exposing a fresh wound. Thank you for sharing this with us. God bless and stay up.
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    Crush

    10/14/2010

    oh thank you so much for your time and understanding.

    WordSlinger commented on lauren

    10-14-2010

    Crush, your poetry is always a great read, but this one shows the readers how delicious your skills are, Icing, and the cake itself is appreciated, as the customer says to the baker, I'll be back, good day.. ty WS
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    Crush

    10/14/2010

    lol....thank you WS. i adore you. your comments on my work are great and are actually more expressive than my poems. thank you for your time.

    arronpalmer commented on lauren

    10-14-2010

    My girlfriend's name is Lauren. This moved me. The last line is so so simple, but effective. I'd like to say well done, but of course I'd rather you'd never had to have written it, and that your Lauren was still around. Still, nice tribute.
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    Crush

    10/14/2010

    i am sure your lauren is as lovely as mine was / is. just treat her like a princess. thank you for your time. i do so appreciate it.

    Jammin commented on lauren

    10-13-2010

    I love "...the longing in her laughter..." How grief-stricken you sound. I hope all is a little lighter now... Her beauty was wonderfully conveyed. How lucky to have known such a woman...
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    Crush

    10/14/2010

    she is missed and thank you for your compliment. it is most appreciated.

    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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