snapshot

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  • Sadness/ Darkness

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    just a glimpse into one of my bad days.

    snapshot

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    life becomes an unreasonable feast
    when charm and beauty becomes the beast
    abused my body in criminal ways
    and misused hobbies
    on holidays
    love is close but out of reach
    it's bleeding at my fingertips
    death awaits while hell's been breeched
    so coarsely kissed me on my lips
    the tears that fill my mason jars
    that cold and cloudy mixture
    are remnants from some former scars
    and that completes this picture











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    tierra7 commented on snapshot

    06-05-2012

    a heart wrenchin' feel...sad but written sooo beautifully!! Blessings! ,Tierra
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    SerenityWintirs commented on snapshot

    05-30-2011

    The first five lines are stunning and mesmerizing. They speak of looking back on some unknown addiction. I had to read this several times to fully comprehend the tragedy of the work. And yet as angsty as it is, it also seems to breath an essence of hope.
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    Crush

    06/11/2011

    thank you so much for your time ! i appreciate the support and critique.

    cheronld commented on snapshot

    04-22-2011

    If only we could be the fly on the wall...the secrets that it would release...the title to this one said so much in that one word...and I agree with MindNumbing...I am glad that you have this as an outlet of sorts...in this forum you will never be alone...an emotional write and so honest...I offer my friendship if ever needed...Cher
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    Crush

    04/23/2011

    thank you, cher. so glad to see that you are still here as i have heard that the site is closing down. i love your work and have checked in here to read you for inspiration...and have rec'd it.

    cheronld

    04/24/2011

    That is quite a compliment my friend...and I am humbled by your comment...I have removed the majority of my writes and its sad that this site is not doing well anymore...I hope that wherever you post....that it will be well recieved as you are quite the talent...inspiration goes both ways my friend...good luck and keep me posted....Cher

    MindNumbing commented on snapshot

    01-26-2011

    Glad to see you posting again, Crush. You've conveyed it all so well, but I have to assume that there's alot more to that picture than the things you've mentioned here. Read my latest... use it as your answer to this ;) Beautiful write, my friend.
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    Crush

    02/27/2011

    yes, there are. you are correct, which is why i call this one snapshot. thanks for your time and i will read your poem now.

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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