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    a smoking gun and tiny fingers tremble
    as a soul departs with only seven years of memories
    an empty baby carriage insults the dawn
    while a rumour of angels cry on the lawn

    unfit husbands
    beneath the rite of midnight
    dress in vests filled with dynamite
    a plane filled with hope speeds toward the coast
    but some dreams die upon bedpost
    the evening news has tv's broken
    now who will scream for the softer spoken

    we pack our bags and strap on ghosts
    a plane filled with hope speeds toward the coast
    made of children and scissors and paper mache
    we all become martyrs from the ricochet











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    Olan01 commented on low

    10-14-2010

    The loss of innocence so well written in this masterpiece of words is a joy to read in it sadness.
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    Savant commented on low

    08-13-2010

    Don't know why I immediately started thinking about 911. I suppose no one will ever mention death and planes and not go back to that horrific scene. Who will scream for the soft spoken? This line had the most impact on me. Who will be the hero? Maybe The Caped CRush! Powerful piece, delivered excellently.
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    Crush

    08/13/2010

    thank you for your time savant.....i haven't written in awhile but i have been reading you and i am always impressed by your talent.

    ApaqRasgirl commented on low

    07-04-2010

    The loss of a child is never easy and left with memories to make you cry the rest of your life. love Asha
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    Crush

    07/04/2010

    true, and they are the most innocent among us. the ricochet of mad men is what i discuss here and how everyone is effected including innocent babies.

    ApaqRasgirl commented on low

    07-04-2010

    This was great, so sad the picture you paint that still flows so well to the end. terrific. thanks for sharing love Asha
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    Crush

    08/13/2010

    thank u and sorry for just getting back to u.

    cheronld commented on low

    07-03-2010

    Wow...what a heartfelt punch to the gut....this was a truly moving and touching piece.....simply awesome....I am very touched...Cher
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    Crush

    07/04/2010

    thank you so very much...i appreciate your time . i try to write it raw and true while maintaining decorum.

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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