ceremony

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    Poem Commentary

    to err is human, but sins are intentional.

    ceremony





    a war waged and forged
    between
    angels and demons in the morgue
     
    the angels cry and take my eyes
    the demons spit and rip off my penis
            it's their problem now
    demons take what's left of my worse thoughts
    and the frown from my brow
    angels cut me off at the wrists
    desiring hands not fists
    no violence allowed

    my mind was amused by lust
    teased yet tortured by my twisted realities
    trust and love were the casualties
    disguised in everything unjust
    i am the captured and the caught
    the bruised man choosing to be self taught
    my fractured heart falls apart
    and lies in pieces on the floor
    wild dogs howl awaiting the scraps by the door
    my legs are torn open
    split like sticks and broken
    i can never run away

    i've been the script on the bridge
    and the "i hate you" notes on the fridge

    more angels take my arms
    for they cherish the hugs i've held
    unprecedented and unparalleled
    are not these sins
    but in the end
    i have still made my bed...in hell







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    KellyRedhead commented on ceremony

    09-27-2010

    I love your depiction of the evil and good that wages war in our souls and your take on that there is a price to pay. I love the structure of your poem with longer sentences...how you've laid out the rythm. Kelly
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    Crush

    09/27/2010

    thank you very much, most appreciated.

    Marsink commented on ceremony

    09-14-2010

    What a tortured rant of adrenaline emotion! The graphic narration is so personal and pictoral with an ambling meter dressed in rhyme at well punctuated intervals. (please don't resign you self to hell, I heard there's an infinitely superior place) I enjoy your work: it Crushes the reader! Applause!!!
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    Crush

    09/14/2010

    i realise that i use the word "hell" a lot in my poetry...lol. i am not so resigned to hell, i just have this dark piece inside of me. i do, however, have hope. thank you so much for reading me.

    Marsink

    09/14/2010

    You're entirely welcome, Sir!

    Helios commented on ceremony

    08-03-2010

    Powerful as Dante's Inferno... a dark dream filled with horrors of the night. Man have always feared the damnations which waits for their sins, yet they continue on... strange concept. Thank-you for sharing. Helios
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    Crush

    08/03/2010

    thank you , helios ! you know that i am still a fan of your work.

    ApaqRasgirl commented on ceremony

    07-04-2010

    I have been there before my friend. A world of darkness creeps in on all of us at times in our lives. Please read 'Just Have Another Smoke' and 'My Dark Abode'.....thanks ever so much love Asha
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    Crush

    11/11/2010

    i will definitely check them out.

    ApaqRasgirl commented on ceremony

    07-04-2010

    Wow! This is a powerful write. So filled with emotion that paints a picture torn, grotesque, ripped apart. great write my friend. I enjoyed this all the way to the last word. thanks for sharing such a wonderful piece of writing with us. love Asha
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    Crush

    07/04/2010

    thank you for your time and kind words. it is not always easy to read darker poetry because it often uses ugly parts. however, imagine how it is to write it and relive certain events and bad dreams.

    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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