ashes to dust

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    ashes to dust

    touching the soul... an emotional strain
    reaching to the depths of pain
    caught in an eternal whirlwind... in the blink of eye


    dust scatters through the air
    the fog of despair
    eclipsing life as the world comes down


    lost in the wind
    scattered again
    a whispering voice screaming in the face of god


    life shifts to the left
    a peaceful unrest
    and the world should mourn with a collective sigh


    across eternity and into the dark
    deaths journey embarked
    breathless a tear streams down a sullen face


    darkened kisses of blood
    of blasphemous love
    leave a bittersweet taste in the mouths of the enchanted

     

    a soul caught in strife
    a killing by life
    the heart of a dark giant beats no more


    like a mid-autumns rust
    from ashes to dust
    time turns the world to a mournful shade of grey

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    Madelynn commented on ashes to dust

    04-29-2010

    When all that we are, and everyone we are close to-or, just know casually-are FIN, the concept of life really can become alot less 'worthwhile', cant it?-The mind frame you had to put yourself into, to create such depth is that of spirit who really gets the whole...'why' to life! I find this piece to be brilliantly dark, yet, extremly truthful about our end in this plain. Dano, the one who inspired your write, would be above and beyond proud of you for such dedication to ALL human spirits! Let me say this -Your work will never be dust in the wind-this kind of talent never dies!! -smiles,Maddi
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    Dano

    04/29/2010

    thank you so much maddi for such a nice and insightful comment... this was a very emotional peice for me write and i actually have yet to be able to go and read it all of the way through again with braking down

    Springsize commented on ashes to dust

    04-28-2010

    Dano, the Form of this poem is perfect. I immediately noticed that you're accentuating your thoughts with two short lines, followed by the long line... which really does set the long line in a kind-of spotlight. It's a strong technique, and a good read. The message is, the other swing of the pendulum... taking Reader into the pits... It's like being in the Duende, seeing the worst from the best view. Very contrasting. And after several reads and acute attention, I note that the experience occurs in the blink of an eye... whew! ... but the ending is the keypoint best, "mournful shade of gey" is an environment that feels detached and seemingly void of emotion. Again... the contrast from the two moods..is striking... And well-written.
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    Dano

    04/29/2010

    thank you spring for reading and for the nice comment

    TheDreamWalker commented on ashes to dust

    04-27-2010

    truly amazing dano as always your writing amazes me
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    Dano

    04/27/2010

    thanks for always leaving such nice comments...

    ansari commented on ashes to dust

    04-23-2010

    dano, enjoyed your poem. a journey deep down into the heart or time , expressions so imaginative so vivid so powerful. keep writing...its a pleasure to read them.
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    Dano

    04/23/2010

    thank you ansari for taking the time to read and comment... it is very much appriciated

    ladynight commented on ashes to dust

    04-23-2010

    its as if you are speaking of death. not sure if its the death of something specific or death in general. but it kind seems more of a general sense. there are so many feelings and emotions wrapped up in this piece. its like as your reading thoughts form in your mind. your words are amazing.
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    Dano

    04/23/2010

    thank you lady... this was a tough one for me to write...

    The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

    Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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