a blinding eclipse :: Dano :: Original Poetry

a blinding eclipse

the world casts a shadow over my heart today
a blinding eclipse of sorrow and woe
tears bleed the color from my humbled eyes
and i blink quickly so the pain wont show

i touch my cheek and a stain appears on my skin
transferring the color of painful memories
the paralyzing thoughts of a final goodbye
and the time since spent in disparity

i contort my face and force myself to smile... and
try shift my thoughts to a time of lesser grey
when i could see a light cast in the dark
and the mirrors reflection didnt see me this way

the gleemless shadows of my sullen eyes
stare lifelessly into a void of nothing
life drips color into deadening thoughts
to fight off the rush of reality

the ever darkening hues of spinning dread
swirl before my bewildered eyes
the shadows move within the vortex
and devour the colors from my mind

wearily the day passes with impulses of desperation
an eternity dies as the second hand unwinds
lost within the shadows of the eclipsing sorrow
i erode in slow motion with the flowing of time

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Doshima commented on a blinding eclipse 09-28-2010: Life,eternity dying, nothingness and many more evolving into eclipsing sorrow -- all woven beautifully into this poem . a wonderful read.; Reply to Comment

Dano 09/28/2010: thank you very much for your kind words

DeepEclipse commented on a blinding eclipse 09-28-2010: Potent wording Dano. You write well from the darker dimension of things. This is one of those pieces that expresses itself in such honest raw form that some may turn their head, afraid it may take their saftey away. I like how it faces it head on. It is what's felt. Why not express it as it is. Enjoyed the read.; Reply to Comment

Dano 09/28/2010: thanks so much for your encouraging words

smoothdame commented on a blinding eclipse 09-27-2010: I liked the way you tied the poem with the darkness of an eclipse it made the words more real to me great job.; Reply to Comment

Dano 09/27/2010: thank you for taking the time to read an comment...

Marsink commented on a blinding eclipse 09-26-2010: The title alone, is very compelling! I think you have eclipsed many who attempt to put such depth of despair into words! Applause building! The tempo of your phrases is excellent!; Reply to Comment

Dano 09/27/2010: thank you marsink... this is a high compliment coming from you and greatly appritiated

Springsize commented on a blinding eclipse 09-22-2010: The day, as seen and felt by you is sadder than is fair... and you've used so many unusual and creative phrases, such as when the "mirrors reflections didn't see me this way" is so honest and "life drips color into the deadening thoughts" as if to bring the dead back to being... and "shadows devouring the colors" is oddly real... and you end the poem with the fear that it is permanent, unchangeable and painfully, fearfully existing ... almost, as if waiting .. for justice to be finished... although the "unwinding of the second hand" ---eroding in slow motion identifies a hell that Seems unending... and the dark breathes on, as if it were afraid the light would burn more than the fires of nightmares... and this is so hurtful to read, and relate to one's own failings... some, of which can be powerful and horrifically enduring...; Reply to Comment

Dano 09/27/2010: you always leave such insightful comments... your ability to break down and analyze other peoples thoughts with precision is fantastic... thank you

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the depth of...	11	11/19/2010
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autumn	14	10/21/2010
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luna~tic	19	10/05/2010
the darkness	13	09/27/2010
a blinding eclipse	16	09/17/2010
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immortal kiss	47	09/08/2010
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what i write (part 2)	8	08/16/2010
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the mourning fog	1	11/20/2009
when the fires burn	1	11/20/2009
through the night	1	11/18/2009
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anxiety	2	10/27/2009
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untitled...	0	10/19/2009
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what to do	1	10/15/2009
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