twisted

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    twisted

    i turn to find my direction
    the world shifts with me... and
    i lose my focus
    tunnel vision invades my eyes
    and all direction is lost
    shadows move and dance in my peripheral
    causing my mind to go blind... and
    i taste confusion in back of my throat


    with each turn my head swims
    the light fades in and out
    and my eyes see spots
    my head bobbles and shifts on my shoulders
    i feel dizzy... and light headed as
    anxiety and adrenaline rip
    through my cerebellum
    i taste panic in my mouth
     

    all around me walls appear
    smashing into my face
    causing my eyes to water
    eroding bricks bleed moss
    slimy and wet... dripping
    smearing my clothes and staining my skin
    wretched thoughts build new walls
    i taste fear on my tongue


    i feel trapped...
    each step leads to another blocked path
    each turn to another wretched thought
    the world shifts twists and swirls
    i look to the sky and it spins into my eyes
    black and white to color and back again
    tunnel vision leads to blindness
    closing off my mind... the light shines
    i taste the death of my soul

     

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    JadedJezzabel commented on twisted

    11-03-2010

    intense!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!black and white to color and back again tunnel vision leads to blindness..................love this line
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    Dano

    11/03/2010

    thanks again jezz

    WordSlinger commented on twisted

    10-29-2010

    Your description of my days of following Slayer all over the continent of the United states is amazing, how do you do it. I like the clear discriptions on agony, ty WS
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    Dano

    10/29/2010

    thanks so much for your comments and your friendship word... it is more appriciated than you know...

    MarionYost commented on twisted

    10-28-2010

    Can't tell you how many times I've felt this, the images depicted in your poetry is always vivid & adds to the awesomeness of your poems. All the best -Marion- hahaha.. looks like Dahlusion thinks so too ha.. Great write.
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    Dano

    10/29/2010

    thanks for stopping by marion your comments are always very much appriciated

    dahlusion commented on twisted

    10-28-2010

    Dano, you are the master of dark, deary, dismal imagery, and I love it because its from your soul and not for the effect of alarming your readers. This is the real thing and that's what makes it so powerful. " i feel trapped... each step leads to another blocked path each turn to another wretched thought" —WOW!! I know this experience. Bravo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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    Dano

    10/29/2010

    there is a shallowness to poetry that you read that might be written just for the sake of alarming the readers... i would like to think or hope that my poetry is deeper than that... thanks as always for taking the time to read and comment

    lunamarie commented on twisted

    10-28-2010

    ....... oh myy ... how did you know what happens to me when I post a poem on OP?? ...... hmmmmmm .......
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    Dano

    10/29/2010

    i guess because it happens to me too...

    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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