next to a bed...

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    next to a bed...

     


    next to a bed i sit and mourn
    tears rip across my skin
    as i hold a lifeless hand...

     

    the air is heavy and i gasp for breath
    the sorrow filling up in my chest


    i grind my teeth...


    holding my breath i try to breathe
    i open my mouth and try to speak
    but the words get spun back inside of me

     

    next to a bed she sits and mourns
    tears rip across her skin
    she clings to a lifeless hand...


    the air is heavy and she cant catch her breath
    the sorrow pressing down on her chest


    for her i grind my teeth...


    releasing her breath she tries to breathe
    she opens her mouth as if to speak
    but her words never make it to me


    next to a bed i sit with her and mourn
    a trail of tears ripped across our skin
    holding eachothers hands...

     

    the air is heavy but gone is his breath
    the last of life escaping his chest


    once again i grind my teeth...

     

    i hold my breath refusing to breathe
    i close my mouth... because i cant speak
    my words are trapped inside of me

     

    next a bed we sit and mourn
    endless tears rip across our skin
    we cling to eachothers familiar hands...

     

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    susanismith commented on next to a bed...

    06-11-2010

    Amazing, I can't even try to imagine these thoughts being reality when I know it happens everyday. You paint a clear picture, and I mourn for their lost love. Another written masterpiece.
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    Dano

    06/12/2010

    masterpeice?... im not so sure about that... but thank you all the same for reading

    Rhymer commented on next to a bed...

    05-31-2010

    I have sat beside the bed and held the hand of those leaving this life. Your vivd description captures the pain of the loved ones clinging on until the last breath. The death watch is portrayed excellently in this write as only you could have done. 10
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    Dano

    06/01/2010

    thanks rhymer

    Madelynn commented on next to a bed...

    05-31-2010

    I can't leave a personal comment on this write- because this piece was very personal for me. I actually had to struggle through the poem. That said, the poem was that powerfully intense to me, and you have written this with nothing less than what you truely are capable of; which is brilliance, Dano. Thank you for sharing such a moving piece of art with us. -Maddi
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    Dano

    06/01/2010

    thank you maddi... this one was very difficult to write and still terribly hard for me to read...

    Springsize commented on next to a bed...

    05-29-2010

    Dano, I don't know if this is created or experienced, but you have brought Reader into the room and expressed the feelings of the muted moment... reaching both sides of life. as by holding the hand of one who has just passed from body while holding the hand of one pulses alive, and shares your feelings of memories, loss and clinging each, to the other, for familiarity. Very real feelings here -- reverent and kindly written.
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    Dano

    06/01/2010

    thank you for taking the time to read and comment

    Teardrops commented on next to a bed...

    05-21-2010

    How i know what you mean and you discribe it like it really feels you have a truly great poem here . Thanks for letting me rread it Marie
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    Dano

    06/01/2010

    thanks for taking the time to read marie... i truly appriciate it

    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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