the universe...

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    the universe...

    the universe is testing me and i dont like it
    twisting and turning and pulling me
    and i dont like it

    showing me things
    id rather not see... and
    bringing back painful memories


    playing with my emotions
    without the notion
    of what it is doing to me


    pulling at my heartstrings
    opening old wounds to bleed
    and i dont like it


    the universe is mocking me and i dont like it
    seems to be that it is laughing at me
    and i dont like it


    rubbing in my face the things
    forcing me to think... and
    dusting off cobwebbed memories


    toying with my emotions
    setting tears in motion
    that might destroy me


    grinning as my heart beats
    mashing salt where i use to bleed
    and i dont like it


    the universe seems to be testing and mocking
    and grinning and laughing
    and playing and
    toying with me
    and
    i
    dont
    like
    it

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    ginga commented on the universe...

    09-19-2010

    Dano, Your one repetitive line is the hook in a poem of what gets to someone. It works here and all that you dislike is warranted. ginga
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    Dano

    09/20/2010

    thanks for taking the time to read and comment

    JadedJezzabel commented on the universe...

    09-18-2010

    the universe seems to be testing and mocking and grinning and laughing and playing and toying with me and i dont like it AWSOME ENDING TO THIS.........A 10 ++++++++++++++++++
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    Dano

    09/18/2010

    thank you

    MarionYost commented on the universe...

    09-17-2010

    A never ending cycle for the hell that we refer to as life & yet we keep pressing on. Great write. Definitely one of my favorite poets on this site. Keep 'em coming! All the best -Marion-
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    Dano

    09/18/2010

    thank you so much marion for your continue support of my work... it is greatly appriciated

    redbloodink commented on the universe...

    09-17-2010

    I liked this write for I know this test but I stand in faith that Jesus didn't die in vain for me.... nor did He die in vain for you.... just keep making better life choosing choices and laugh back...... red
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    Dano

    09/18/2010

    thanks

    Chaos128 commented on the universe...

    09-16-2010

    Great rendition. I guess we all feel like that sometime or other... Like the universe is a great big dartboard and we're the bullseye.
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    Dano

    09/18/2010

    thanks for taking the time to rea and comment...

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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