within these flames

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    within these flames

    i set fire to my soul to scorch the pain
    never thought it would burn out of control
    thought i could keep myself refrained
    but what i find is what i didnt know


    i stepped into the fire thinking it was for the best
    but only found i couldnt escape
    the pain of memories ive tried to forget
    smolder in front of my face


    inhaling fire into my lungs
    my chest burns with every breath
    second guessing the things ive done
    as fire rages in my chest


    the who and what of where and when
    melt together in my brain
    the things i know and where ive been
    strike with increasing pain


    the fire burns within the dark
    it flickers to light my path
    the rising flames engross my heart
    and charr it to a sullen black


    the loss of self within these flames
    singe away the who i am
    so in the fire i still remain
    surviving the best i can

     

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    Olan01 commented on within these flames

    09-20-2010

    Another wonderful poem from the pen of Dano. It reminds me of my poem about the individuation process. Great work.
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    Dano

    09/27/2010

    thanks olan

    Olan01

    09/27/2010

    Congrats on you win. It is well deserved.

    Springsize commented on within these flames

    09-14-2010

    You begin this poem, bringing Reader into your experience, a self-inflicted burning to destroy the pain, as if it were a cancerous or foul form... your use of the metaphor, a back fire is acute... and frightening, as you find yourself in the midst of that which you wanted to alleviate from your thinking... seemingly surrounding by the foul... Your use of the "blackened heart" was a knife of an impact here... struck hard... and your ending to survive in the midst of all this "as best you can"... is so REAL... as that is exactly how it feels, at least to me, sometimes... All in all, the mechanics of this poem are good and the Intent evokes just a smidgeon of the pain emanating...
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    Dano

    09/14/2010

    thanks so much for such kind words...

    Oblaidon commented on within these flames

    09-02-2010

    I saw your "Read My Poetry" post from the forum. Hmmmm, good write. It seems to me you are talking about hell. Well, that is what I get from it. I give it a 10. Nice job.
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    Dano

    09/02/2010

    it hell of sorts... thanks for taking the time to read and comment...

    JadedJezzabel commented on within these flames

    08-29-2010

    the honesty in the way you write touches me in a place i keep locked up.......very few even know its there much less have broken in....yet the beauty in your thoughts and words seek it out and find it wide open. words can not express how much i love and relate to this poem.
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    Dano

    08/30/2010

    i am glad that my poetry has touched you but i am also sorry that you can relate to it...

    Teardrops commented on within these flames

    08-28-2010

    You have to stop second guessing what has already come and gone you can't bring back the past the future is being written and today is what must be the time . Now we can correct and re-do to make the future a thing we love and look forward too . Great poem well written and a winner in my book Marie
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    Dano

    08/30/2010

    thanks marie

    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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