Salted Wound

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    A Fallen Soul's Journey To Hell .....

    Salted Wound

    It came to me in my descent
    Cloaked in hatred - draped in fire.
    Evil tasting - my pain so sweet
    My misery It's only desire.

    Devouring flesh - my salted wound,
    Sucking bile from my blackened soul.
    Dragging me deeper into it's depths,
    My agony It's only goal.

    Hell hath no mercy and no regret.
    No inkling of love or the pure.
    It's unquenched thirst cannot be fulfilled,
    This beast craves and cries out for more.

    Further I fall into the abyss,
    My body and soul - feeding the gloom.
    While the minions sit and gorge themselves,
    Forever feasting upon my salted wound.

     

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    mustascheman commented on Salted Wound

    05-10-2010

    Hhmmmmm...I see...well...If it were a case where you seemed more willing to have fallen into the pit unselfishly...your 'last supper' would taste all the sweeter!!!!!
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    knight4696

    05/10/2010

    Okay I see what your sayin' - but doesn't fear taste sweet? I thought that's what the master liked. Isn't the thrill of the chase - more appealing then a cowards defeat? :)

    mustascheman

    05/10/2010

    NO SILLY.....that's only applies when you're chasing girls!!!!!!

    am2anangel commented on Salted Wound

    01-28-2010

    definitely a dark write this one. very descriptive in your telling very well worded.
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    knight4696

    01/30/2010

    Thx Angel! :) I wrote this on a challenge. Mootpoint said he'd post another dark one if I did. This poem was my reply! :) Thanks again! Ken

    Charlie23 commented on Salted Wound

    11-19-2009

    Written from a true poet! Your dark side often leaves me wanting to read more. Blows my mind at times the talent behind the darker writings, maybe I haven't been on this site long enough, but I don't really remember seeing that style win a contest here and there certainly are times when they are best!
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    knight4696

    11/19/2009

    Thanks! I sometimes find this style difficult to write and a challenge .. I find it easier to write about my emotions, love, confusion, etc.. But I like the challenge of creating characters and their story lines. I don't think a really dark poem has won, maybe the judges don't find it to be book friendly ... But, maybe they're forgetting about great poets who wrote about the Darker side .. like Poe for example. I don't know what they are looking for. I won with my poem "Blank Page" which I am thankful for - but I don't think it's one of my best. Anyway .... Thank you very much for your appreciation!! :) Ken

    ginga commented on Salted Wound

    11-08-2009

    Knight, A raw and gritty account of what one's wound (emotional or physical) can lead to. A very well-crafted and gutsy poem of wrath and gore. ginga
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    knight4696

    11/08/2009

    Thanks again Ginga! I'm glad you enjoy my dark side. I actually find it more challenging to write in this style then I do in my others. Thanks again, Ken

    Grito commented on Salted Wound

    11-01-2009

    A great write of the netherworld, a real tribute to Poetsof blood, she seems to have a way of making poets red!!!
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    knight4696

    11/01/2009

    Ya ,,, she certainly does, doesn't she? :) Thanks for the comments my friend!

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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