In My Desperate Hour

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    Poem Commentary

    This is the 3rd poem in a series dealing with Depression - The 1st is Maybe Tomorrow, 2nd is On The Cliff's Edge and 4th is In A Blink Of An Eye ======================================================================= A serious dark look into depression and it's sometimes devastating outcome ... This disease is not to be taken lightly. This poem is written to convey just how serious it can be. I've lost family members and friends to it, and feel it is a subject that must be written about. Please do not perceive this to be a personal cry for help .. it's not .. It's a plea for awareness. Thanks for reading and God Bless all of you who have had this disease effect your lives and the lives of your loved ones. ..... Ken

    In My Desperate Hour

     I'm here alone in the dark ...
                  where no one can hear  ~ 
                                                 me cry.
    I'm slowly falling apart ...
                  desperately,  I cling  ~
                                                 to life.
    Counting the hours that pass ...
                  with each grain of sand  ~
                                                 that falls.
    I'm slipping away so fast ...
                  lying here, curled up in  ~ 
                                                 a ball.
    It is here that I'll succumb ...
                  watching my time slip  ~
                                                 away.
    Feeling so lifeless and numb ...
                   there's just no escaping  ~
                                                this pain. 
    Gasping to take my last breath ...
                   can't find the will or ~
                                                power.
    Overcome ~ I embrace death ...
                   here in my desperate ~ 
                                                hour.                                 
                                  

     
                                                
                                                   
                                 
                                            


         
                 

         

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    FranzJ commented on In My Desperate Hour

    08-16-2010

    I can feel the despration in this one - I truly feel for that split second a person must be truely insane to endit all
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    knight4696

    08/16/2010

    Thanks Franz ... I can only say that I have never come to this point .. but, being honest .. the thought had crossed my mind. As I stated before ... Depression Kills and can win if we let it. Thanks again Pal! :) Ken

    cheronld commented on In My Desperate Hour

    05-14-2010

    Truly powerful and once again so relatable...I will never know how it was I didn't die one nite as I did every thing to ensure it....this poem gives voice to the feeling one has going into such a decision...
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    knight4696

    05/21/2010

    Thank you so much Cheron, I am happy that your guardian angel - didn't allow it and that you are here with us to share your wonderful poetry. :) Thank you again my friend for all your reads and comments. They are much appreciated! :) Ken

    Teardrops commented on In My Desperate Hour

    03-13-2010

    the knight the defender of right you see the human who hurts and can feel as they do geat write my friend truly great Marie
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    knight4696

    03/14/2010

    Thanks Marie - This one was difficult to write. I had to dig deep for the emotions ... But i needed to capture the thoughts of one commiting the act. This is the 3rd in a series of 4 poems that I wrote on Depression and it's effects on those inflicted as well as those who have lived with a loved one that has paid the ultimate price. Thanks again! :) Ken

    FadingFebruary commented on In My Desperate Hour

    02-20-2010

    I like your style; It's very lyrical and fluid. Good job :]
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    knight4696

    02/20/2010

    Thanks FF! :) I appreciate your comments and reads very much. Thanks again, Ken

    am2anangel commented on In My Desperate Hour

    01-25-2010

    pure genius. loved it again. I may never get to sleep tonight if i don't stop reading you. lol! I guess I'll have to spread your work out over time and comment as often as I can. I'm enjoying your work. I especially liked the lay out of this piece very pleasing to the eye. another great write.
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    knight4696

    01/26/2010

    lol! Please don't lose sleep over me! :) But seriously, I really appreciate all the reads and comments! I'm truly happy you enjoy my work. Thanks again friend! :) Ken

    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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