Chase Me

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    we'll leave it at this: im not thin.

    Chase Me
    Thin nips at the heels of my feet,
    like a biting frost
    coming from somewhere where the wind blows cold.
    Her chiding voice coos in my ear,
    trying to seduce my unsteady mind
    into her soul stealing ways.
    I struggle,
    I kick. For I don't want
    to care.
    But she knows, sooner or later,
    my self image will be in her clutches. 

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    danmartyjake1 commented on Chase Me

    01-13-2011

    I like this because it leaves just enough mystery in it's wake. Very clever writing. Enjoyable reading.
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    brokenhearted11

    01/14/2011

    yeah, i happen to like the mysterious side of poetry.. thanks! xD

    purdylox commented on Chase Me

    01-11-2011

    nice piece, I like this one .................. smiles ........... :)
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    brokenhearted11

    01/11/2011

    thank you

    KING commented on Chase Me

    01-11-2011

    Nice! I like how you have kept us hanging wanting to know who "she" is. I hope you subtly continue your battle with her in other poems you write.
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    brokenhearted11

    01/11/2011

    haha, she=thin.... anywho, thanks!

    angelchaser commented on Chase Me

    01-03-2011

    Honey, you always write such well written and interesting pieces and this is certainly no exception. You've masterfully described your self consciousness here like I never could. No matter whether you're thin or not, you're beautiful no matter what. I think all of your friends here will agree with me on that too, as I have never heard anything but very nice things said about you here. *hugs*
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    brokenhearted11

    01/03/2011

    why thank you! im an extremely self conscious person, though i strive not to be... and thanks, i appreciate it(: *hugssss*

    bubba commented on Chase Me

    12-30-2010

    Nice broken its very well done just like the rest of yours i paint a picture the more i read the better the picture gets i can hear the voice echoing around its very good girl
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    brokenhearted11

    12/30/2010

    thanks! im glad the picture in your mind is formed by those simple words of mine, makes me feel important :)

    The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

    Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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