Dancing Mind

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Dancing Mind

That mind dances.
Interestingly so, it corrects and recorrects itself,
with no warning or repercussions.
Moving in an absolutely fluid,
rhythmless sort of rhythm.
Its contents,
however dark they may seem to be,
they still manage to grasp the smallest splatter
of good. Of sun and sweet,
and fresh mowed grass.
Of smiling faces
and the most innocent child.
Of linen hanging on a line to dry in a soft breeze,
and of laughter in the very soul.
Even a simple splatter of good
can cancel out years worth of dark. 

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purdylox commented on Dancing Mind

01-11-2011

I like this finding the good moment in the darkness and having it float in your mind bouncing around there lasting longer than a moment

brokenhearted11

01/11/2011

exactly! being able to retreat to your 'happy place' when the dark gets to be too much. thanks!

papapaczki commented on Dancing Mind

01-10-2011

I sometimes feel like I have ADD. My mind likes to move in rhythm constantly.

brokenhearted11

01/10/2011

i actually DO have ADD/ADHD, and mine is a total chaotic mess sometimes, and in others, its perfectly organized

Musicmynded1 commented on Dancing Mind

01-10-2011

Very well put into words, the mynds thought processing. Good writing.

brokenhearted11

01/10/2011

thanks.

angelchaser commented on Dancing Mind

01-10-2011

Your wisdom at such a young age is to be cherished. You know, daniellf and I have both talked about how you have a better vocabulary than either of us :). I really enjoyed this, broken. The way you describe the mind dancing to different thoughts is clever and I love how you say that a simple splatter of good can cancel out years of dark. You are a true poet, my friend. All the best to you.

brokenhearted11

01/10/2011

thankyou!! ah, its such an ego trip to be called wise when im not that at alll(: hahaa but im nto gonna deny my vocab, though its arrogant of me.... and thanks, i wasnt so sure of that line, but my friend nichole said it was okay, so i kept ittt... oh, and backatcha angel, thanks.

bubba commented on Dancing Mind

01-09-2011

Hmm. Now this is interesting, I seem to stutter when searching for word's to describe my reaction upon reading this yet all i can seem to do is read it once more every time i read it, It change's not for the worse every time it gets better, im not too sure how to describe your work here today but i am gonna try, The fact that that you say how just a little of good can shed the years of dark is very catching, that is what keeps me rereading it, It seems to me that the mind is never consistent which is my case i have a random mind, i like how no matter how dark the thoughts there is always a splatter of good, which to me means no matter the dark thoughts there is always some form of sunshine on the other side just breaking through the dark, i know this isn't a good review of it but its kinda mind blowing dont ask me how it just is.----Daniel

brokenhearted11

01/10/2011

haha i saw this and i said YAY! A LONNNNG COMMENT! so, im assuming you thought it was okay?? i was just playing around with my friend nichole and she gave me some random words to work into a poem. i think they were dark splatter and something else..... anywho, you seem to grasp it perfectly. thanks, and it was a great review xD

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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