January Air

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January Air

I step out the heavy front door
and into the mist.
I whistle in the cold
January air,
and, remotely, wince
as it scrapes down my throat. 
The music in my head slows down a pace,
and I sit on the steps.
The cold concrete-and-brick seems,
for once,
lonely.
The stars aren't as bright,
 the breath not as warm,
and the hour not as exciting.
Midnight is so much smaller without you.  

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KING commented on January Air

01-11-2011

I can relate to this alot. Reminds me of the days here in LA. Im always comparing it to the summer nights when the coldest it would get is 57 and that is like at 4am. Usually it is near the 70's or higher and the moonwill shine some nights across the ocean all the way to sunrise. Impressive write on nature. :)

brokenhearted11

01/11/2011

wow thats warrrm.. yeah, that concrete makes for a cold ass xD thankyou!!

JacobAngel commented on January Air

01-11-2011

i like, i like. this is a very powerful poem. keep iot up. (:

brokenhearted11

01/11/2011

thanks(:

SuSpence commented on January Air

01-11-2011

I like the short glimpse into your daily life here. And I also love some of the things I have forgotten about the cold since moving to Florida so many years ago. Like sitting on cold brick, freezing your ass off haha, and the coldness of the air as you breathe it in chills your lungs. Great imagery and descriptions. Peace and Love, Spence

brokenhearted11

01/11/2011

thankyou! its set in the middle of the night, i shouldve put thatt in there xD anyways, thanks. i freeze my ass off on a regular basis ;)

Lunabella commented on January Air

01-10-2011

short sweet and a look into a moment in your life. bravado. 10 -Luna

brokenhearted11

01/10/2011

hahah bravado is a nursing bra, but okay xD. thanks!!

angelchaser commented on January Air

01-10-2011

This is really touching and I agree, life is colder without the one you love near you. Breathtaking in its simplicity, you've woven a beautiful tapestry here, broken. May you never stop weaving.

brokenhearted11

01/10/2011

exactly. simplicity is what i do best XD. as long as she's around, i doubt i will. thanks

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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