Transcendance

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    Transcendance
    Transcendance


    I walked along the shore and noticed every living thing
    Particles from centuries past the windswept waters edge
    Bursts of sunlight pierced my broken comprehension
    Awareness struck me
    Rusty gages, worn frayed edges of things softened my heart
    A shift began
    A Melody filled me
    Purpose became my heart

    -MJacobs

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    Chaos128 commented on Transcendance

    03-19-2010

    You have a true gift for idiom, and your tangential connections actually create lines to read between. It's a confident author that doesn't feel the need to hold the reader's hand. Artie's 100% right, this is a real 10.
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    danmartyjake1

    03/22/2010

    Many thanks for that compliment. I appreciate you reading "Transcendance" and for seeing beyond the words to the truest meaning. ;-)

    Artie commented on Transcendance

    09-13-2009

    I love this. I spent most of my childhood on the beach, and miss it everyday. 10 from me.
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    danmartyjake1

    09/13/2009

    Thanks Artie, I am reading yours right now.

    trocka7 commented on Transcendance

    09-08-2009

    Once again, absolutely beautiful! The lines, "Bursts of sunlight pierced my broken comprehension/ Awareness struck me" are incredible and speak volumes about the nature of awareness and I was struck by your ability to put it so easily into words. Your poems have the unique ability of moving me in a very personal way, thank you for sharing...
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    danmartyjake1

    09/09/2009

    I am pleased that my poem could do that. Thanks for sharing with me.

    ginga commented on Transcendance

    09-04-2009

    jake, If you want imagery comments, this poem certainly passes the test with a 10.The vivid description is wonderful. The one stanza short, but succinct style is perfect! ginga
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    danmartyjake1

    09/05/2009

    Thanks for your valuable feedback

    laydbak1 commented on Transcendance

    07-09-2009

    Hi... I was just doing a few random reads and saw yours on the opening page and came here to check it out... I enjoyed the imagery here in this piece, but I got stumped on the your interpretation of one word gages near the end and took it literally as symbolic of a challenge of some sort in the context... A good write...
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    danmartyjake1

    08/31/2009

    Thanks for your rating and comments.. please rate my other poems

    danmartyjake1

    08/31/2009

    Thanks for your rating and comments.. please rate my other poems

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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