Bursting

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    Spring has come to scandinavia once more

    Bursting

    Flowers are bursting thru the thawing dirt

    I feel like having a premature summer flirt

    Pass the joint and spread the word

    Of the wonderful news that I’ve just heard

     

    Revelations are bursting out of my revitalized mind

    Let’s leave the dormant far behind

    I give up on truth and I accept that I’m blind

    “Each pray’r accepted, and each wish resign’d”

     

    My chest is bursting and I’m caught in the act

    It’s time to make good on a drunken pact

    Life is way short, that’s a matter of fact

    The world’s in movement and I’m about to react

     

    Leaves are bursting out of the waking trees

    I beat around her bush and I’m being such a tease

    Headfuls of hair pupeteered by a pleasant breeze

    Could this be the promised land of do-as-you-please?

     

    Emotion bursting from the words that she said

    A very special someone is lying in my bed

    The mood is mellow and the sundown is red

    In league with the living I accept god is dead

     

    Bubbles are bursting in my beer

    Acceptance is tearing at my veneer

    Jump right in, the water’s clear

    What do you know, spring is here

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    ImStillHere commented on Bursting

    03-14-2011

    Haha :) thats so sweet, like i spring fling, well, fling... Just a note, make sure your rhyming scheme flows throughout the poem. :) other than that, it was great. ~Audrey
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    stigbohnolsen

    03/14/2011

    Would you care to elaborate? Just so that i can improve it

    rsalassi commented on Bursting

    03-14-2011

    I think you're really progressing, Stiggy. While you have not entirely quelled your raging hormones, you have managed nicely to use them in your work in moderation and disciplined. As with your umpteen burstings, I, too, find this write bursting with a freshness that's exhilarating. I honestly must note one line, however, that gave me pause..."Headfuls of hair pupeteered by a pleasant breeze." But that's just me. Great write.
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    stigbohnolsen

    03/14/2011

    I am quite fond of that line as well. Actually, I'm quite fond of the entire thing

    rsalassi

    03/14/2011

    As you should be. It IS a great write.

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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