Depths of Fire

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    Depths of Fire

     For you I walked through the depths of fire,
    Only to find out you're a liar.
    You pulled my heart like thread until it was just an empty spool.
    Why did I waste my wilted heart on such a fool?
    I asked you to put my broken heart back together,
    Instead you ripped it apart like a feather.
    You spoke words so full of compassion,
    Then you turned right around and burned my heart until it was ashen.
    I'd gone through all of this pain for you,
    Only to find out it was never true.
    But for you I'd still walk through the depths of fire,
    Even though my heart is so full of tire.

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    ApaqRasgirl commented on Depths of Fire

    12-27-2010

    oh wow, yes reality can be really hurtful at times but you my dear have poured out such true emotion and passion from your heart in this piece........a masterpiece of perfect rhythm, rhyme and flow and I will be watching this poem as it rises even higher to the winning circle and when it falls out of the contest do not hesitate to add it back again as I see this one all the way to the top......well done dear.....keep rockin them out with your unique style.......love asha
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    kdarcy commented on Depths of Fire

    12-18-2010

    The reality of things not being what you thought or wanted. An excellent write with many great lines, be well k
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    LenaM commented on Depths of Fire

    12-18-2010

    excellent write full of love and pain that for me at times has been intertwined and this line stands out for me (You spoke words so full of compassion,Then you turned right around and burned my heart until it was ashen.) I can relate so well
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    dahlusion commented on Depths of Fire

    12-18-2010

    "I asked you to put my broken heart back together, Instead you ripped it apart like a feather."—oh, so powerful and original. A look into your aching heart by way of lovely metaphors. Bravo!!!!!!!
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    julieannetx commented on Depths of Fire

    12-16-2010

    I see great potential here...keep up the good work...very soul baring.....raw emotions when someone you love hurts you.
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