lagos

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    • catarino
    • Cultures come to conquer and their gods applaud.

    lagos

    i have retreated from the balcony
    and closed the door behind me.

    through an open window, cold
    a distant seranade awakens.

    an undiscovered voice arrives tonight.

    an ancient song of longing thrives, tonight.

    within this minute, existence.

    i imagine the hills this song has traveled
    and the trees within me,

    limb by limb,

    reaching with each leaf to be
    shaken desperately.

    she is the quite stream that leaves,
    she is.

    she is the lake that lingers,
    she is.

    i live listening to the notes of old
    songs,

    sung by young lovers,
    waiting for the rain.

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    wamomo commented on lagos

    12-18-2009

    ..this is utterly enchanting; both emotionally and metaphorically...thank you

    mamasan commented on lagos

    11-10-2009

    I'll be darned and I don't know why Caterino but this piece of music reminds me of the tale of Romeo and juliet. If I sound daft its because i am still drunk from the words you put before us. Thanks

    SavVySam commented on lagos

    10-09-2009

    "she is the lake that lingers" and so does the resonance of this piece, long after reading. Deeply beautiful!

    RHPeat commented on lagos

    05-20-2009

    This is a grand love poem I love the images; they move me. I suggest to close the space between the two (tonight) lines so that the antithesis metaphor has more play for the reader. They would work off of one another if they were closer together. Otherwise I like all the other spacing. I love this image: (serenade awakens), The idea that before that moment the music was sleeping. Beautiful.

    lightcourier commented on lagos

    05-15-2009

    I like the image of retreating from the balcony and the ancient voice within. Liked the repeating line she is and a new suffusion of that voice. very nice. Enjoyed reading. Thanks!

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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