broken beat
she must ofreally
loved the beat
ing
she received last
night.
it wet me when
she cried.
only broke
one promise but
i told a million
lies.
broken beat
3 Comments
- catarino
- Cultures come to conquer and their gods applaud.
really
loved the beat
ing
she received last
night.
it wet me when
she cried.
only broke
one promise but
i told a million
lies.
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Poem Comments
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optimistic commented on broken beat
12-20-2009
- The words discharged across the page display a lot of emotion and internal expression from the heart.The courage and bravery to speak of this type of poetry is great.
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ginga commented on broken beat
12-20-2009
- catarino, Very powerful words, very unique format, a poem that can hopefully undo the wrongs. ginga
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mamasan commented on broken beat
11-10-2009
- I read this three times at least to try to get the beat but was not able to follow it. I asked myself if this was some kind of ab use. Then I just left it for it troubled me. sincerely, mamasan
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11/10/2009
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