Immolated

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    Immolated
    here I stand
    woke up from a dream of lies
    the earth like glass
    I can't grasp
    a moment of peace
    there is no release
    from my disease
    I cannot ease
    others lives only complicate
    my tenuous ties
    and make the world a darker place
    I break every mirror I face
    and here I stand
    in this world of lies
    bitten by flies of failure
    and disgrace
    there is no redemption
    no hope
    no fall from grace
    a sideways tunnel to the next world of hate
    a fear i cant negate
    or negotiate
    I walk a line
    between destruction and redemption
    I drink fire
    and I drown in expression
    my world is my eyes
    and I'm blind from the noise
    each screech of love
    of laughter
    rips and annoys
    and here I stand
    without a scratch
    my hand on the latch
    about to set fire and lock myself in
    and scream in the darkness
    as the flames melt my skin

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    MalikPeterson commented on Immolated

    11-17-2009

    This one is good as well man. Again you have a good flow. This one is chock full of emotion and it seems as if you are ready to let it all go...but never fear...tomorrow is another day. Nice one. May the kudos be with you. Cheers!!!
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    kittman101 commented on Immolated

    06-29-2009

    now this one is truly deep, and the emotions you send with it are very powerful. This is one of depression, and it tells how you want to lock yourself away from teh world and you are truly dieing from within.
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    AmadeusEx

    06/29/2009

    i wrote this in the midst of one of my many crises...it still holds up though, i like this one alot, and coming from another writer, i appreciate your sharpened poetic eyes as impartial judges of my work

    Aaros commented on Immolated

    06-28-2009

    your style in this poem gets close to the rhythm of a rap. love it, plug in something to nail the emotions to the ground with a repeating hook line and you got a song here
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    AmadeusEx

    06/28/2009

    i wish i knew how to do that, sadly, im completely inept when it comes to music...glad you loved the poem though

    quise commented on Immolated

    06-27-2009

    i looove this poem makes me think of a person in a room of glass going bizzerk cause he found out everything he ever knew as real is a lie
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    AmadeusEx

    06/29/2009

    well said quise, it kind of felt that way to me too at the time

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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