L I M B O

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    I would really appreciate everyone's unique individual interpretation of this short piece... I was originally going to title it Fear The HangMan. Ah... a new title altogether.. thanks ming ... I'll try that and I never change titles.. revised from Un-existing. Soul

    L I M B O


    Wanting to exhale

    Searching to hear even a whisper of a breath

    Waiting to be awakened

    Feeling as if life exists within a hallowed void

    Being Covered by a pale shade of nothingness

    The numbing is less than peaceful

    Then the disappearance becomes spatial
     

    Suddenly knowing that the time missing -

      - Is the time that death sang a lullaby to your soul

     

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    dancinghawk commented on L I M B O

    12-28-2010

    LIMBO is perfect for this state ... part Dante, part transmigration of the soul ... and part good ol' U.S. of A. livin' ... zombies everywhere, holy cats ... great write, interpret-able in many ways, which is my favorite, like an abstract painting ... -dh
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    soulwriter

    12/29/2010

    Greatly appreciated - love your outlook... thx Smiles Soul

    Marsink commented on L I M B O

    12-24-2010

    I don't know what Limbo really is...Some may have its need in inventing hope for fixing what was never accomplished while the living made their choices...As to your inventive construct and eerie, out-of reality-mood, this is a solemn, sad, void that exists in the soul's vacuum between 'shoud have, would have, could have' and 'Oh, my God! It's You!!' Thanks for an evocative and age-old question of 'what's after this life?' Applause Building!!!
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    soulwriter

    12/29/2010

    I have to say that your comments are eloquent and insightful... it is great that there are so many different personal comments to this piece.

    Ming commented on L I M B O

    12-23-2010

    The title that comes to mind for me, the image in my head is "L I M B O" that space between there and here, now and death, being and not being., the difference between the journey and the quest. Just my 2cents. -Ming
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    soulwriter

    12/23/2010

    Thanks my friend for the comment... and I like your suggestion of .... had crossed my mind at one point and I am now going to change it which I never do after I have titled a piece. Soul

    optimistic commented on L I M B O

    12-07-2010

    I did not want the poem to end I gues all ends to a thought pictured in your mind what a fabulous poem this was.
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    thecross commented on L I M B O

    11-30-2010

    I'm gonna have to agree with RhPeat on this one about attempting this without the "ing" words. I feel too many ing words can take away from the potential of a piece, especially a shorter piece such as this where I feel stronger tighter words would fill out this write nicely,
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    soulwriter

    11/30/2010

    Your words of inspection are most appreciated - a total rewrite would be quite the task, however I will use the words of wisdom for the future............. Soul The great thing about poetry is that most pieces are fully open for interpretation and the different views of many make for a great collection of thought!

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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