Controlled

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  • Love

    Poem Commentary

    Reposted (written years ago, but always a lesson well learned and applied): There are times that we feel trapped by our own emotions, while finding ourselves captured by the alluring spell of another. Not all love is perfect, the important self evaluation is to be strong enough to find the power from within to be in control of your own destiny.

    Controlled

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    Beguile, beget, beset asunder

    I betray the spell you cast me under

     

    Dwindling to dwell

    Dangling, devour, to have fallen and fell

     

    A slain, I complain; assassin, insane

    No sanity, consecrated with pain

     

    Mercy - merciful, unmarried, dismayed

    Which you tarried to torture, tempered; afraid

     

    Clawing , cleaving, why crying when

    Tempted, trapped in your deceitful den

     

    With grudge, gasping, push-pulling

    Sanctified, sexually alluring

     

    Hampering, harping ones heart

    Unconcerned, not learned, exploited apart

     

    Worried and weathered, binding in hell

    How to dissipate a portentous spell

     

    Vehement or virulent kind of being

    I possess now a succinct sight of seeing

     

    The mystic has been tattered and torn

    Facing the enmity of a loving scorn

     

    Vindicated from an amorous greed

    A once inextricable soul is freed

     

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    JadedJezzabel commented on Controlled

    08-07-2010

    you brought the damn thing here soul..........love the topic......love the time and the rhyme was perfect...........awsome
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    knight4696 commented on Controlled

    05-07-2010

    Soul - I love the word choice and flow of this piece. Very unique rhyming scheme and the content is definately a lesson well learned - Great write Pal! :) Ken
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    soulwriter

    05/07/2010

    And yet another one of my personal favorites.... just started playing with the sounds of words and this started running and jumping all over the written page - one definitely done on notebook paper and moved all around to develop a certain meaning and sound. Thanks my friend!

    Marsink commented on Controlled

    01-22-2010

    Been there, lost that. your approach is very atypical in structure with alliteration and consecutive lines rhyme. I really enjoyed the intensity and carefully chosen words paired to have their discreet effect! A 10 for shore!
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    ArizonaPlay commented on Controlled

    11-23-2009

    This has now become my most favorite poem's on here very very dam fine job
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    soulwriter

    11/23/2009

    An honor and a half - I thank you ... "words are eternal, once spoken they can never be erased from space!"

    mamasan commented on Controlled

    11-07-2009

    Ah the web we sometimes spin is of our own making. But, sometimes things can be undone and moved to a new beginning. Perhaps our accountability and responsibility will be what attends to our tears deep within our furrowed cheeks.
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    soulwriter

    11/11/2009

    Wise words - thx so much for the comments

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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