Taylor

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    A boy that I sit by in English class INSISTED that I name a poem after him. This is for you, Taylor.

    Taylor

     I followed behind, quickly
    to make sure he didn't fall in.
    Before his light-up Spiderman shoes
    even touched the water,
    a helpless toad caught his attention
    and he ran after it.

    I smiled and watched him go about
    when I heard Grandma say something.
    I caught her in the corner of my eye,
    sitting in a pale green lawn chair,
    smoking with Pa.

    "But you know,"
    she continued,
    "He could be good for her."
    Pa scratched at the gray stubble on his chin
    and grunted.
    It was then that I discovered
    they were talking about you.
    I smiled and scooped up Taylor,
    promising him ice cream after dinner.
    He smiled with glee, holding the toad
    in his small hands.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

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    dahlusion commented on Taylor

    04-09-2010

    "I smiled and watched him go about when I heard Grandma say something. I caught her in the corner of my eye, sitting in a pale green lawn chair, smoking with Pa." — this brought me back to my childhood watching my grandparents. This is a wonderfully poetic tale. Bravo!!
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    BringMeBullets

    04/09/2010

    Thank you much, Dah. Makes me miss my grammy and papa.

    Musicmynded1 commented on Taylor

    04-08-2010

    ......................................................intriguing,,, keep up all u do in your writing brandi,, it'll all add up and get somewhere:) newt
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    BringMeBullets

    04/08/2010

    Thank you. :) That gives me hope...

    MindNumbing commented on Taylor

    04-08-2010

    The pictures you paint with your words are simply outstanding, BMB. This played out like a tiny movie in my head, and it's one of those movies that I could watch over and over again :) Great job!
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    BringMeBullets

    04/08/2010

    Thank you! MN, you are so generous...

    Dano commented on Taylor

    04-07-2010

    this feels very real to me... nicely written... very nicely done
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    BringMeBullets

    04/08/2010

    Thank you, Dano. :) I enjoy your comments.

    dancinghawk commented on Taylor

    04-07-2010

    wow, Bullets, this is an awesome layering of voice and perspective ... you, the toad, Taylor, grandparents, and whomever "he" is ... which is "you" ... very nicely done, interesting write and an interesting vignette of little moments ... -dh
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    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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