Pick Up

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    Pick Up

     "Hey Brandi... It's Kevin (phone static), I was wondering if you wanted to get back together?... Give me a call. Love you."

    "Brandi. It's John. I just want you to know that I'm here for you if you need a shoulder to cry on. I know you have been going through a lot of tough stuff lately. Just know that I'm here for you. (TV sounds) I love you Brandi. See you tomorrow."

    ....

    Please don't try to fix me.
    I'm not broken.
    There are some things you can't help.

    I love this town and the people in it.
    The way the leaves shiver in the early morning,
    and grow loose in the afternoon.

    Message deleted.

    Puddles litter the sides of the roads.
    They ripple with each slight disruption.
    Effortlessly,
    I wait for tommorrow.
    Because there's no hope for today.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

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    iLuvPoetryJACOB commented on Pick Up

    06-14-2010

    I'm usually not very fond of dialogue in poems, but this is amazing. I love the way you used simple things like the leaves and and puddles to mirror your emotions. Truly an amazing write. --Natalie.
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    BringMeBullets

    06/18/2010

    Awe... Thank you so much. :)

    MindNumbing commented on Pick Up

    04-21-2010

    You have such a strong, beautiful vision Bullets... this is amazing! It felt like a little movie playing out as I watch the leaves bend and the ripples in the puddles as the cars drive by. You are a true artist in every sense of the word.
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    BringMeBullets

    04/21/2010

    Oh my... I don't know about that. But thank you so much. Haha. It really does mean a lot to me.

    Jayandben commented on Pick Up

    03-16-2010

    I love how you interpreted your life with your thoughts. It mized very well.
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    BringMeBullets

    03/16/2010

    Thank you. I like this one. :)

    Madelynn commented on Pick Up

    03-03-2010

    Puddles litter the sides of the roads. They ripple with each slight disruption. Effortlessly, I wait for tommorrow. Because there's no hope for today'-AWSOME! This last part, stand on its own! This is what it means to be a born writer. I am simply awe struck by your talent.-you are the reason I continue to search for new reads! You are a very gifted young women!-Incedible hun.-Maddi
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    BringMeBullets

    03/03/2010

    Thank you, Maddi. Your comments leave me blushing. It's too much! You give me too much credit! Ha ha. :)

    Dano commented on Pick Up

    02-28-2010

    "Effortlessly, I wait for tommorrow. Because there's no hope for today"... these words resonate with me... the entire peice speaks volumes to me but the last lines are echoing through my mind...
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    BringMeBullets

    03/02/2010

    I am glad. I love you, Dano. You are a friend dear to my heart. :)

    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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