I Wish

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    Sometimes this is how I feel.

    I Wish

     I wish you health.
    I wish you innner peace.
    I wish you light for the places
    too dark to see.

    I wish you wisdom.
    I wish you well.
    I wish you flowers
    in the places you have fell.

    I wish I could tell you
    what I really feel inside.
    I wish I could face you,
    instead, I hide.

    I wish you love,
    and health from disease.
    And to all the locked doors,
    I wish you a key.

    I wish you patients.
    I wish you strength.
    I wish you conscience
    to go that extra length.

    I wish you happiness.
    But above all this,
    when you finally find her,
    I wish you a kiss.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

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    joanna commented on I Wish

    04-23-2010

    Simplicity is key in this poem, its purity shines like a diadem! Good job!
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    BringMeBullets

    04/23/2010

    Thank you... :)

    Oblaidon commented on I Wish

    02-25-2010

    Nice ending. I like this line: I wish I could tell you what I really feel inside. I wish I could face you, instead, I hide.
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    BringMeBullets

    02/25/2010

    Thank you so much. :)

    dahlusion commented on I Wish

    02-25-2010

    "I wish you light for the places too dark to see." — I love this line! "when you finally find her, I wish you a kiss" — oh, my! You are real, very, very real.
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    BringMeBullets

    02/25/2010

    Thank you, Dah. It's an honor to be graced with a comment like this. :)

    danmartyjake1 commented on I Wish

    02-18-2010

    Simple, Delicate and Beautiful, wishes that I saved into my faves list. I like the style, flow and ending.
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    BringMeBullets

    02/18/2010

    Thank you so much. :) This one was different... But I like it okay.

    knight4696 commented on I Wish

    01-28-2010

    This is a very sweet sentiment. Nicely conveyed! :) Ken
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    BringMeBullets

    02/02/2010

    Thank you very much. All feedback means a lot to me. :)

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    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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