Can You Hear Me?
I'll say not one word,
not one syllable to you;
Just look at me, dear,
is my message getting through?
Can you hear the silent me?
Can You Hear Me?
4 Comments
- ImStillHere
- My daughter is turning 2 soon! I miss and love y’all!
Poem Commentary
This is an example of a Tanka, one of the oldest forms of Japanese poetry... :) it is 5 lines of poetry with 5 syllables in the first line, 7, 5 again, 7, then 7 more.
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Poem Comments
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1blackbarbie commented on Can You Hear Me?
03-03-2011
- i don't know if this is what you were going for but it made me think of that look a mother gives to their child, where they already know what she's saying without saying anything. great poem
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03/04/2011
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MootPoint commented on Can You Hear Me?
02-24-2011
- Hmmm, I think I can. I think I can. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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02/24/2011
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sanctus commented on Can You Hear Me?
02-24-2011
- wonderful write… it is powerful in it’s simplicity
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02/24/2011
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eclecticchic202 commented on Can You Hear Me?
02-23-2011
- It makes me happy to know that there are still people who love the older more stylistic forms of poetry as opposed to freeform. Great piece, very simple :D
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02/23/2011
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