June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

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    • ManOnTheMoon
    • Past the ocean, and into the clouds, we sail into the sun...

    June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM
    These walls,
    The bare floor,
    Wooden doors and glass windows,
    This house makes not a home,
    But an open prison,
    Free to leave,
    But no choice in returning.

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    Chaos128 commented on June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

    09-16-2010

    Avant garde in the house ha ha. Here I discern... a prison of the protagonist's own making. Not the happiest environment... but it's better than the unknown. People are always more comfortable with the devil they know. I am happily impressed, Brother Moon : )
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    RoseFromARose commented on June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

    08-23-2010

    This poem leaves you feeling empty, not because the poem is empty but because the house is. The ending speaks volumes for this write. It makes you wonder why there is such freedom and yet such a hindering in that freedom. Great write.
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    pocketofdreams6 commented on June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

    08-09-2010

    This reminds me of buying our own private cages, and not even really realizing it. Spoke great volumes, and was very impressed for as short as it was!
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    brokenhearted11 commented on June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

    08-08-2010

    theres something about it, that i cant quite touch, but is lingering. very short, sweet and to the point. keep writing :)
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    shaniac commented on June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

    07-27-2010

    Very powerful poem, crammed into a small space. Nicely written, keep it up!
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