you unfinished

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    you unfinished

     these tears I do not wish to dry
    for they could become an ocean
    the one that would bring you to my shore
    and I have all my heart to try
    even in the light of the moon
    hoping for that chance to see you once more
    my ache in the sands of time
    is withdrawals from space so full of you
    longing for your presence like never before
    my soul in its painful cry
    claiming miles of so much unseen
    shooting off flares from its very core



    we had existed
    in a fortunate way
    letting all the days
    run together as they may
    never a small sunset
    beneath our brows
    we lived it free
    and we loved it loud
    we had ignited
    fires upon sheets
    even days of gray
    couldn't dampen our heat
    a melody of us
    sang so true
    in everything we'd said
    and in everything we'd do

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    HarverTomsson commented on you unfinished

    07-21-2009

    Ahem.. I missed the r in your.....................
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    HarverTomsson commented on you unfinished

    07-21-2009

    You have a rare gift to express sadness so painfully beautiful. Such wistful longing having "all of you heart to try."
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    kingone43 commented on you unfinished

    07-21-2009

    Nice Work. I Enjoied Readind It. Good Way To Tell Of The Pain And Lose.
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    Strider commented on you unfinished

    07-21-2009

    Nice poem. Nice and simple way to express pain and loss.
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