not so unseen now

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  • Lost Love

    not so unseen now
    you walked in
    with the cold wind behind you
    laid your keys on the table
    I pretended not to notice you
    my face would give away
    how my season had changed
    overnight from a perfect life
    to a god-awful drain
    but you were out of sight then
    oh how long has it been
    I was busy trying to keep this dream alive
    keeping my heart where it should've been
    like a thief you have stolen from me
    when I was not looking
    I wasn't fixed on reading any signs
    because my life was happy
    now I know where it is you go
    when it seems that I don't know
    but I watch as you unravel us
    and rake our life across the coals

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    Marsink commented on not so unseen now

    10-18-2009

    How much of the pain we endure is sometimes is by choice (not choosing hurt, but the environment that it thrives in) I can remember all my bad decisions, whether to stay or flee.
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    Artie commented on not so unseen now

    08-28-2009

    This is an amazing look inside a heartbreak. 10 from me.
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    rollerderby commented on not so unseen now

    12-06-2008

    I could feel the pain and anguish in the poem you have written. It seems that we all write our best when the heart is involved. well done.
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    dahlusion commented on not so unseen now

    12-05-2008

    I have flown this flight and walked through the same ruins—beautiful!
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