under the moon

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    i wrote this after i heard a song by Insane Clown Posse....i can't remember the song title

    under the moon

     The sky is falling
    And as I sit in the pouring rain
    I can see a city
    Burning to the ground
    My lover sits on the ground
    Standing all alone
    With my darling love
    He's watching the fire
    While I watch the rain
    He stands and takes my hand
    I look and see him smile
    He points to the moon and whispers
    'We'll always be together, because
    We're both under the moon'
    So my love we'll always be together
    No, not something so mysterious
    F*ck you and the moon
    Now as I think
    Sitting here in jail
    What it was he meant
    An evil smile forms upon my face
    As I sit ant think about
    The crimson grass I left
    Upon that hill
    While we stood under the moon

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    sevyn7 commented on under the moon

    12-15-2010

    what a scary write this is, you have your own style, and its so devilishly good.
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    kage commented on under the moon

    01-19-2010

    I like this it has a personal touch . well put together something that you can be proud of
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    BeverlyMichaels commented on under the moon

    12-23-2009

    I liked it, I can't say I understand all of it, but it flows nicely
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    Rhymer commented on under the moon

    12-22-2009

    What an interesting dark write, you are rapidly becoming one of my favorites, 10 from me.
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    SuperChick76 commented on under the moon

    12-22-2009

    Very interesting. It's about being used? The imagery is pretty good, though I believe "As I sit ant think about" was supposed to be "and." The flow was very nice. A bit confusing though, but who am I to speak? I'm practically a walking contradiction. The poem was very nicely written, I enjoyed it greatly. But why is the town burning? Why do you hate him now? That's the two questions that it brings up. Nicely written. I enjoyed it a lot. Good job. =D
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