Raw

Acid based in composition
vile stench that lingers.
The sudden rip of flesh
has made me numb.
How dare you leave the
one you claim to love so much.
Easy to fall in hard to let go of,
promise of forever broken overnight.
Your true face comes to light,
heartache and heartbreak by light of day.
Who are you? My new enemy
destroys without a blow.
The impact never ends
you make me homicidal.
You move on and I am stuck
with all the fallout.
You still want to be friends
but I am just not in that friendly place.
You can't give me time,
you say now or never.
All or nothing, sink or swim.
Hate is a strong word but
I really don't like you.
Our love is over, I'm sad to say
but I refuse to crumble.
I am letting you go in style,
honesty and respect.

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sweetchinee commented on Raw

12-03-2010

Powerful words of anger and pain.... writing is sometimes the best therapy of letting it all out and allowing others to identify with what u feel....in some strange way it makes us feel stronger... I encourage you to make life's difficulties into beautiful poetry... keep writing...

smoothdame

12/03/2010

thank you for reading and responding to my poem and I will keep writing my feelings down.

ESSENCEOFLOVE commented on Raw

11-22-2010

I love this smoothdame. I love the word pictures, the honesty and, yes, raw emotions flowing. Great write, I can relate...........E

smoothdame

11/24/2010

I was in a dark place I know but if something is bothering me I use it im my poetry.

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

smoothdame’s Poems (29)

Title Comments
Title Comments
Prosaic Nation 0
Chains 3
Truth bout me 1
Inner us 1
Letting go 3
For you 2
The Game 1
Unattractive 6
Confusion 3
All of me 6
Raw 3
Fear me revisited 6
Fear Me 4
I can be 4
Illusion Gone 5
Scraps 6
Stand (The Patriot Act) 6
Made to love you 2
Waiting 3
Like That 3
I want to fall in love 3
Submerged revisited 0
Let's Breakup 2
Silence 1
Alone 2
U 2
Good Enough 3
School is a Business 2
You had your day 2