Breathe

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    Breathe

     This is defeat.
    I wrap solitude around me,
    Like a thick shawl
    On a cool starry evening.

    This is defeat.
    Loss trembles
    Like the surface of water
    Brushed by a breeze.

    This is defeat.
    That the best of me was given
    And the least of me remains.
    Losing you -- a worthy gain.

    But the loss of every inch I gave,
    Has whittled me down in size.
    My independence offered
    Was taken and devoured.

    This is defeat
    And solitude,
    My welcome guest.

    I close my eyes,
    And breathe.

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    Hampton commented on Breathe

    09-16-2009

    A superbly writen poem of anguish at the loss of love and relief at the reconnection with life.
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    dahlusion commented on Breathe

    09-10-2009

    "Loss trembles Like the surface of water Brushed by a breeze" — this is amongst the best of poetic lines to be penned. This poem reflects the heart of a true poet.
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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