Just Thinking

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  • Sadness

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    Although I usually prefer a more loosely flowing form, sometimes it just doesn't come out that way.  

    Just Thinking

     Just Thinking

    The chill seeps damply all around
    Intensifying pale Apollo's frown.
    Cannot the names of martyrs be forgot?
    Or is it now for us to wonder what

    Becomes of those who fled the world before
    The rest of us could knock upon their door?
    I in my dissentient soul-of-soul
    Care nothing for their rambling control.

    We cannot question all we ever see
    Yet somehow must discover where the key
    Waits to fill the darkness (is it reason?)
    With the bursting forth of every season.

    I lost you as time melted on and on
    So the searching goes (you are not gone!)
    Until the star of the eastern way
    Is lost to the blossoming light of day...

    MLS

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    tierra7 commented on Just Thinking

    01-06-2010

    bloomingsun, this is fabulous....very nice...i really enjoyed it...it brought out some awareness...ty for sharin' hun..... NAMASTE...Terra@}-'-,- (10+ )
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    knight4696 commented on Just Thinking

    12-27-2009

    Ahhh ... a Very interesting write ... I love how it makes me stop and think. Different from others I have read of yours ... not that - that's a bad thing .. this is one of my faves! Great Job!
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    bloomingsun

    12/27/2009

    Thank you, thank you... so glad you liked it. It is a rather different one for me, it's true.

    danmartyjake1 commented on Just Thinking

    12-10-2009

    This is poignant and pondering all at once. I enjoyed the searching part and the questions posed..........
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    bloomingsun

    12/11/2009

    This is a different style for me, I don't usually find such form, so I am glad to hear you like it. Thanks...

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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