haiku
a fog horn belchesechoing into our dreams
of bowing birches
haiku
7 Comments
echoing into our dreams
of bowing birches
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knight4696 commented on haiku
12-27-2009
- Nice work here Bloomingsun. I am not a real fan of Haiku - but I am starting to understand their allure. So much said in so few words - there's something to be said for that. Again, Very nice work! .... Ken
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12/27/2009
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Bettysrainbow48 commented on haiku
12-18-2009
- This is a well put together little poem. Good Job.
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12/18/2009
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12-16-2009
- bloomingsun, An interesting haiku that employs the b's and d's quite splendidly. ginga
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12/16/2009
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12-13-2009
- Haikus are tough. I like what you've done here. Word choice is so important and with the limits one has, it's important not to waste any. I think a title should set the stage. Introduce the topic of subject. This piece does conjure up a somewhat mystical, poignant scene. I can picture myself standing on a dock in the early morning, at daybreak. The bowing birches suggesting a restlessness, as a distant storm approaches. A good offering. Thanks for sharing it... Kevin
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12/13/2009
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HarverTomsson commented on haiku
12-07-2009
- In its purest form haiku's first line introduces the actor, or subject; the second, the action, and the third, the consequence or result: literal, symbolic, or emotional. I like this one, and want to play with it, sustituting "past" for "of". Good write.
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12/08/2009
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12/08/2009
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