a dark mind

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    a dark mind


    footsteps sloshing
    through slippery streets
    gushing rain slides off my soul
    as if it were dirty grease
    not even my shadow
    follows behind
    no crack to allow
    the slightest
    ray of light
    just the cold dank darkness
    of my soggy mind
    no dull beacon shines
    through this impenetrable gloom
    my mind aches for brightness
    some luminous sheen
    arid simplicity
    an anhydrous roll
    for this sticky sodden
    weariful soul
    but a small crack appears
    in this internal strife
    where there is ache
    there is also life

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    Teardrops commented on a dark mind

    02-24-2011

    Wonderful cowboy you have felt the cold mornings and the endless wetness of riding in the rain love the poem and the way you ended it is a master peice Marie
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    shallenemcgrath commented on a dark mind

    02-24-2011

    Perfect Ending! Damn you are good! :-P How am I ever going to keep up with you?
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    train64

    02/24/2011

    Well in all modesty....i know that you are smiling when you say that...

    shallenemcgrath

    02/24/2011

    will you quit it Mr. Modesty? You know that you are one of the best narrative poets on this site... and fortunately for us all, far from being self-absorbed.

    train64

    02/24/2011

    You make me chuckle S..yeah i ain't too self -absorbed..

    sanctus commented on a dark mind

    02-24-2011

    well composed and crafted piece of work,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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