Surfer Dude

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    None of us has a pure heart.

    Surfer Dude

    Surfer dude

                Riding the waves

    Into oblivion

                Ne’er watchful

    For the fins

                Swarming

    To engulf and

                Devour

    Your dreams

     

    Your passion

                Enthralls

    While danger lurks

                I stand watchful

    To watch your demise

                I say nothing

    Because I delight

                In your destruction

    Thinking erroneously

                to be my saving grace.

     

    Pity you

                Or envy me

    I could be you

                Or you could be me

    So let’s grip the board

                Of mindfulness together,

    Lest we both survive.

     

    Jean Marie

    ©517101008pm/72610

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    Insideme commented on Surfer Dude

    08-18-2010

    A beautiful image put into words, crafted wonderfully. thank you for sharing and for the explanation of the poem below. I didnt see it like that at first but now I see. Poetry means so many different things to different people.
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    jeanpnkldyg

    08/18/2010

    I try to put an image to the soul..Thanks for taking the time!

    NativeAmeriGirl commented on Surfer Dude

    08-18-2010

    Muy Bien!!!! An amazing write.....muchas gracias for the honor....siempre, Native
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    jeanpnkldyg

    08/18/2010

    Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! Many returns!

    NevillePark commented on Surfer Dude

    08-11-2010

    Well Jean... I have to admit. I'm confused about the story behind an odd thought line. It's a death wish wrapped in brown paper somehow. Could be you - could be me - so tell us what we need to see. Maybe it's a vacationing postal worker on his way to a break from reality followed by a tragedy and a national headline.Could be. I dunno ... I'm certainly curious about this by-stander in any event. It's engaging but I find (for me at least) I need more to go on.
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    jeanpnkldyg

    08/11/2010

    Thank you, Neville for commenting. My surfer dude is riding the crest of the wave to the pinnacle of life - but is unaware that somewhere some might secretly be wishful for his demise, thinking it was undeserved, thereby equalizing all. We could be either person in this scenario - and in either case - both are likely to survive.

    stellar commented on Surfer Dude

    08-09-2010

    the dark truth...well i can so much relate with you...I love the way how you do it....wow....
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    jeanpnkldyg

    08/10/2010

    I like to believe that truth is light on the dark cravasses...if your heart was lightened - there be the truth.

    Phoenix9 commented on Surfer Dude

    07-31-2010

    Excellent poem full of feeling and feelings expressed as one truly watching and waiting for the dreams to survive as long as we stand together
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    jeanpnkldyg

    07/31/2010

    Glad to have you comment. Many returns - I am indebted to many. Jean

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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