You Are There (Revised)

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    Poem Commentary

    With the very good suggestions of a friend...JW...here is the revised  version of You Are There
    Thanks JW :)

    You Are There (Revised)
    You are there
    On the edge of every thought
    On the edge of every word within that thought
    On the edge of every letter within that word
    You are there
    You are there
    On the edge of every hour
    On the edge of every minute within that hour
    On the edge of every second within that minute
    You are there
    You are there
    On the edge of every dream
    On the edge of every scene within that dream
    On the edge of every element within that scene
    You are there
    You will be there
    On the edge of my life
    On the edge of every year within that life
    On the edge of every month within that year
    On the edge of everyday within that month
    You will always be there
    You are there,
    On the edge of every thought,
    On the edge of every word within that thought,
    On the edge of every letter within that word.

    On the edge of every hour,
    On the edge of every minute within that hour,
    On the edge of every second within that minute.


    On the edge of every dream,
    On the edge of every scene within that dream,
    On the edge of every element within that scene.

    On the edge of my life,
    On the edge of every year within that life,
    On the edge of every month within that year,
    On the edge of everyday within that month,
    You will always be there!

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    mamasan commented on You Are There (Revised)

    11-01-2009

    I am convinced that whomever "you" is that you will be there. Make sure that you are there to complete the equation to your benefit too. I don't mean this sarcastically but sometimes we leave ourselves out......and sometimes that is the dilemma. Your pictures are nice and you look like a beautiful gypsy and so does your friend. Perhaps you are an artist.....one of my unfulfilled wishes and aspirations.
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    phatdaddee commented on You Are There (Revised)

    09-07-2009

    Wow! You trulu have loved before! Not puppy love either, I mean true love in a state of perpetuity! Love is a journey better traveled than told! You have traveled! Thanks for sharing!
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    BridgetBowen

    10/01/2009

    Thank you so much...you do understand and yes you are right, I have loved and still love and will always love :)

    jademelissa74 commented on You Are There (Revised)

    09-01-2009

    This is a tapestry woven with pure love that is radiant to the naked eye. I love the passion in which you convey your feelings. Whether this kind of love is appreciated or not, to possess this beauty in one's heart is worth every ounce of tears fallen. You did an outstanding job.
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    BridgetBowen

    09/03/2009

    Thank you so much jade...It's nice to see someone who really knows where this came from and you get it completely...much appreciated!

    Grito commented on You Are There (Revised)

    08-20-2009

    Kisses on the edge, embraces on the edge, God holds us at the edge.
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    WordSlinger commented on You Are There (Revised)

    08-14-2009

    this is cool, complete, and whole, a sweet poem for the love ya have, good diddy.
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    BridgetBowen

    08/15/2009

    Had!!! Thanks though.

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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