The place

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  • Death

    The place

    I have frolicked in the darkness

    I have been under the dark clouds

    I have tried to escape

    But they won’t let me out

    I am here in my prisons

    With Black flowers surround

    I am here help me

    I want to get out

     

    This world with the black flowers and the rivers of blood

    This world with blue trees and the purple rabbits and slugs

    This world with the haunted

    This world with the ghosts

    This world with the goblins

    And spirits and their host

    This place were I am stuck

    This place with the dead

    This place were my soul wonders’

    With the shrieks and dread

     

    And in the dark it is lurking seeking me out

    I can’t run I am trapped

    In this world were I don’t belong

    This creature of darkness

    It wants my soul

    I run and hid in terror

    It is coming

    I am the fool

    No!!!!!

    And I die

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    Platti commented on The place

    12-18-2009

    this is the dark place that nobody likes to go to, good write :3
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    BrittKun

    12/19/2009

    thanks!! :#

    danmartyjake1 commented on The place

    12-02-2009

    This is dismal and dark stuff.... It is terrifying and you make it seem very real with your creative style.
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    BrittKun

    12/04/2009

    thanks. I read a lot of fantacy books and just invioned this place

    jademelissa74 commented on The place

    12-02-2009

    A wonderful piece indeed. You write passionately and you manage to maintain a level of interest well throughout the entire poem. Great job!
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    BrittKun

    12/04/2009

    Thanks I try not to be borning when I am working on my conten in the poem.!!!

    gogant commented on The place

    11-24-2009

    A sad place to be, indeed...scary, too. But a very extraordinary rendering of those places nobody wants to live........................g
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    BrittKun

    12/02/2009

    Thanks

    Phoenix9 commented on The place

    11-17-2009

    another great write, well done and great flow.....
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    BrittKun

    11/18/2009

    Thanks for the comment. I was imagie that came to my mind. This place I use to be in the dark world

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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