Burning in Hell

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    • kpeery09
    • "Never Compromise not even in the face of Armageddon"-Jackie Earle Haley as Rorschach from Watchmen movie

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    Its based on a dream I had when i was six years old

    Burning in Hell

    I'm chained to what seems like meat hooks,
    I smell burning, as I look down I hear screams of terror.
    I yell in pain as I feel my flesh being torn from left to right,
    These beings have no faces, I see a man walking towards me,
    he tells me to make a deal.
    I say no,
    I hear more and more men, women, and children screaming in pain, agony as they feel the same torture as I do.
    Now I realize where i am,
    I am in Hell.

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    Maleficent commented on Burning in Hell

    01-03-2010

    well... you must be my new neighbor then! welcome to the hood! seriously... those are some crazy dark thoughts for a 6 yr old... worked into a great write, tho...
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    knight4696 commented on Burning in Hell

    01-03-2010

    Pretty intense dream for a 6 yr old! Damn! quite the vivid tale of Hell ... Nice job! Ken
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    bluepetal commented on Burning in Hell

    01-03-2010

    sort but snapy needs a few words put in new sentences
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    stever commented on Burning in Hell

    12-13-2009

    ahhh yes i have been ther ..i write about it alot like..fantasy reliegon...you should read a few more of mine ..they also simi..short
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    SuperChick76 commented on Burning in Hell

    12-12-2009

    The imagery of this one was very nicely laid out. The flow was also very nice. You had one type, one "I" is an "i." Just htought I'd point that out to you even though it makes absolutely no difference. All in all, if was a very nice read. Just remember, that all poems, no matter how great, can be at least ten times better than their original, or hell, than their finishing copy. But it was a very good poem. Good job. Did I mention the imagery was good? :)
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