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    beneath lines of grey
    he shudders and pulls at
    each side
    resting his fingertips lightly upon
    the soiled ledge-
    the jagged edges leak
    black oil smiles
    reaping pre-sorted freedom

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    wagus commented on untitled

    06-10-2009

    Saw this one untitled and thought would give it a read.. Most times when can't think of title and it short just use the first and last word for one until can come up with better here: Beneath Freedom....... which seems like a good one for it... then resting sticks out so.... Resting Beneath Freedom comes up.... anyway hope ya find a title for it..... as it needs one to get folks attention as most time look at title for words to fit mood in.... and skip untitled ones.....wagus
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    lightcourier commented on untitled

    05-02-2009

    Ahh yes. So openended and full of inference. Very nice. Thanks!
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    Madelynn commented on untitled

    04-03-2009

    Yes! this is the discriptive stuff I have been craving,an artist born,not made.Love it.
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    WordSlinger commented on untitled

    03-25-2009

    Sounds like me roofing, :)
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