untitled 5

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    untitled 5
    crimson scars
    and soft white
    lily
    fringe a haunting
    of chocolate
    and cigarettes-
    a progression of
    fight on fight
    and memories
    of
    thickly cob-webbed corners
    reaching and holding
    forced
    plastic grins
    upon a
    mountain topped
    plea of
    innocence

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    wagus commented on untitled 5

    06-10-2009

    Title suggestion... first last words Crimson Innocence..... the easy one.... and after several reads to see if anything else jumped out that seems to be one best suited to poem.. for me.....wagus
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    abbadejuju commented on untitled 5

    04-30-2009

    you have earned a true fan sis! yabba dabba doo!
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    lightcourier commented on untitled 5

    04-04-2009

    I like your descriptive imagery. Writing to have the meaning between the lines. Indirect sight. Thanks for what you have painted around.
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    Madelynn commented on untitled 5

    04-03-2009

    This is masterly written.I mean, you dont even care who gets what your talking about as long as you write what you are seeing right then and there,your an artist.I can see what your thinking.That is an amazing gift.
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    WordSlinger commented on untitled 5

    03-25-2009

    Interesting appetite.
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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