Unseen Fear

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    Unseen Fear

    A girl is all a see,
    in the shadows ,
    Hair of bronze blowing all around her face.
    setting there almost to far to touch
    I give a smile and I see her face brighten just a little bit.
    Those eye have me mesmerized. How can that be?
    I feel her pain Deep down inside. A cry for help a tear apon her face. My heart aches for the pain I see in front of me.
    How Can I take her pain away?


    5/15/10 

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    Chaos128 commented on Unseen Fear

    07-31-2010

    This piece speaks on many levels. Most are reluctant to examine their pain because doing so is so unpleasant. But that's the only way we can understand what it is and where it comes from, and knowing that, we can formulate a method to overcome it. Very well done!
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    gogant commented on Unseen Fear

    07-01-2010

    When you get a reader to feel the pain within your write, you know you have a true poem............beautifully sad it 'tis....................g
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    BikemanRJ commented on Unseen Fear

    05-19-2010

    A very emotional and heart felt poem. I like the line "I give a smile and I see her face brighten just a little bit." Sometimes just the warmth of a smile can be very encouraging. Very good image and emotion in that line. Maybe in the magic of this smile the love that has been shown will help to take the pain away. Keep on smiling. God Bless Randy
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    mountainlady

    05/19/2010

    ty

    Teardrops commented on Unseen Fear

    05-15-2010

    You have penned a beautiful and heartfelt poem . Great work my friend . Loved it a 10 for me Marie
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    mountainlady

    05/15/2010

    ty so much

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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