THE OCEAN (c) Copyright 2009

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    Poem Commentary

    (This poem was submitted in today's poetry challenge (6.4.09) in the forums with the topic "THE OCEAN." I decided to use that for the title.)

    I imagine someone who comes to the ocean for peace and release of all their sins, worries, etc. beneath the tide. That's the concept of this poem. A dark way to look at this poem is that this is someone who comes to end it all in the ocean.

    THE OCEAN (c) Copyright 2009

    Mighty current splashing 'round
    Lost in nothing but the sound
    I close my eyes and take it in
    And hope to wash away my sin


    Bathing up to neck in suds
    Buried soul beneath the flood
    As far as eye can see the light
    The horizon has no end in sight


    Infinity and beyond, its line
    Connects these waters to the sky
    So what I shed within this wet
    I hope the heavens will forget.


    (c) Copyright 2009 Melanie D. West

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    Marsink commented on THE OCEAN (c) Copyright 2009

    02-15-2010

    I realy can relate and immerse in the water of your words. Thanks for sharing what believers wish to shed and forget, to be more like our Lord.
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    mdpoetgirl

    02/15/2010

    I am grateful and honored to have you critique my poetry.

    amamimichiyo commented on THE OCEAN (c) Copyright 2009

    01-28-2010

    very definitive and simple but the poem was so elegant... it really touched my heart...(",)
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    mdpoetgirl

    02/13/2010

    thanks for stopping by!

    Niecy commented on THE OCEAN (c) Copyright 2009

    12-11-2009

    THE WATER THAT SPRINGS THE ISSUES OF LIFE, BURIED IN THE DEEP, SCATTERED BY IT WAVES, FORGOTTEN AND CEASED IN THE DAZE, ALL MIRRORED IN AN OCEAN! PHENOMENALLY PENNED!
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    mdpoetgirl

    12/12/2009

    Thanks again for reading and for your eloquent feedback ;-)

    Marsink commented on THE OCEAN (c) Copyright 2009

    10-28-2009

    I love this.. very descriptive and probing the heart, to the point and powerful.
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    mdpoetgirl

    10/29/2009

    Why, thank you.

    Hampton commented on THE OCEAN (c) Copyright 2009

    10-06-2009

    A beautuful word picture of the ocean written with great poetic style
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    mdpoetgirl

    10/06/2009

    Thanks for reading. Have a blessed day ;-)

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.
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