HOME RUN (c) Copyright 2009

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    (submitted for Poetry Challenge 6.5.09 on originalpoetry.com forums)

    HOME RUN (c) Copyright 2009

    Sixty seconds and counting
    The tension is mounting
    Crowd on their feet
    Announcers don't miss a beat


    It's going, going...
    1st base, quickening pace
    Around the bend to 2nd place


    Going...
    3rd in sight
    One with the wind and taking flight


    Gone...
    And the crowd goes wild
    It's out of the park!
    No foul


    It's pandemonium in the dome
    As Player of the Day slides into home.


    (c) Copyright 2009 Melanie D. West

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    cmlestrade commented on HOME RUN (c) Copyright 2009

    01-08-2010

    Wonderful poem. my daughter a baseball fan really loves it. baseball is my least favorite sport but the excitement is still there when someone hits a home run.
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    mdpoetgirl

    01/13/2010

    I don't really like baseball either. It was a challenge, so I thought I'd give it a try. Thanks for reading!

    kmooney commented on HOME RUN (c) Copyright 2009

    10-10-2009

    Another great poem. You sure do have a way of grabbing the reader's attention. I love sports poems. This captures the excitement of a homerun in such few words. Very clever well conceived. Have you read my poem A Legend's Final At Bat? It's more of a story poem and is considerably longer but does seem to grab people's attention. Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent again.... Kevin
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    mdpoetgirl

    10/11/2009

    thanks for reading. No, I haven't read that poem of yours, but I will check it out and let u know what I think shortly.

    orsonav commented on HOME RUN (c) Copyright 2009

    06-19-2009

    This is a wonderful poem written on a very unique theme. Most sports fans could appreciate you use of the game of baseball to deliver your poem. I love it.
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    mdpoetgirl

    06/20/2009

    Yeah, I hope baseball fans like it. Not my favorite sport by a longshot, but it was a poetry challenge that I felt I could write a pretty good poem on at that time. Thanks for reading.

    WordSlinger commented on HOME RUN (c) Copyright 2009

    06-15-2009

    cool, Cubs win, Cubs Win, Let's go get some more beer, and penuts, and cracker jax, whho, no 4 real, nice baseball spirit, :)
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    mdpoetgirl

    06/16/2009

    tx for reading, ws... too bad i'm not a true baseball fan, i just rose to the challenge in the poetry forums and wrote on the chosen topic, but the poem must've been effective if you thought i had "nice baseball spirit." ;-) thanx again.

    Niecy commented on HOME RUN (c) Copyright 2009

    06-10-2009

    Just as if I were at the game listening to the annoucer calling play, by play! Unique topical write excellent rhythm!
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    mdpoetgirl

    06/10/2009

    thanks for reading.

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.
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