Sweetly, Bitterly

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  • Lover's Plea

    Sweetly, Bitterly
    Sweetly, bitterly, I beseach...
    Let us twain our souls impeach,
    That life's sandy shore we reach
    To walk hand in hand upon it's beach.

    Sweetly, bitterly, I do plead...
    Let us twain now sow a seed,
    In fertile garden do till and weed
    And sprouting child in love do feed.

    Sweetly, bitterly, I implore...
    Let us twain our hearts explore,
    That ne'er we face a slamming door
    Until in life death takes us o'er.

    Sweetly, bitterly, I contend...
    Let us twain our love defend,
    That of our lives it may be penned
    "Lifetime lovers, forever friends"    .

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    tenderpoison commented on Sweetly, Bitterly

    07-19-2009

    what a wonderful, compassionate and yearning write....I can't really imagine anymore what it would be like to be married to a reasonable person...you are both blessed. 10
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    UnworthyFather

    07/19/2009

    Thank you so much, Tender. I know that I am blessed beyond measure. Thanks.

    UnworthyFather

    07/19/2009

    Thank you so much, Tender. I know that I am blessed beyond measure. Thanks.

    wheelsal commented on Sweetly, Bitterly

    06-24-2009

    Great write is all I can say, not redundancy intended. Love is sweet/bitter and you said it in a fresh way.
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    UnworthyFather

    06/24/2009

    Thank you very much, Wheelsal, for your very kind words.

    Writer1 commented on Sweetly, Bitterly

    06-24-2009

    Okay, this is beautiful, but the LAST LINE gave me goosebumps!! Seriously!! How lovely, poetic...like wedding vows. You put it all there from the beginning of love until the sweet-bitter end. Bravo!! 10
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    UnworthyFather

    06/24/2009

    Thank you very much, Writer1, for your very kind words.

    Chaos128 commented on Sweetly, Bitterly

    06-13-2009

    This is a powerful, yet gentle plea for cooperation in realizing the full potential of a life defining relationship. It's absolutely luminous. RHPeat, you have obviously put a lot of deep thought into your methodical analysis, but poetry is the offspring of the soul; you can't dissect it like a frog in a 10th grade biology class. Poetic license can't be quantified, my man. It's an unquantifiable experience. A warm breeze is for the enjoying of it; it kind of loses its appeal if you run a diagnostic on it.
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    UnworthyFather

    06/13/2009

    Thank you, Chaos128. I am glad that someone understands my piece. Thanks.

    TammyW commented on Sweetly, Bitterly

    06-11-2009

    Oh, this is so beautiful!!! I love it! This is the first poem that I have read on this site, but already I am adding it to my favorites!
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    UnworthyFather

    06/11/2009

    Thank you so much, TammyW. There seems to be some mixed feelings about it, but it came from my heart, and I like it. I am happy that you do as well.

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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