Doldrums

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    In the old days of sailing the high seas, sailors would often find themselves in a calm so deep that the seas looked like glass. These still and calm days were known as Doldrums and were feared by all on the sea.

    Doldrums

     We started with the whispering,
    Screaming winds of passion
    Billowing our sails

    Salt spray stinging lips
    Chapped from constant caress
    Of flesh and pleasure's bite

    Our compass never ceasing
    It's rotation as we sailed
    The seas of our bliss

    Creating our own winds
    Through the fury of our lovemaking...
    Pleasure's Breath

    But what has happened my love?
    Why are the sails hanging limp
    upon our mast now?

    Why are we drifting upon
    The waves of a desolate, deserted
    Marriage, my love?

     Have you dropped anchor?
    Can our passion no longer fill
    The sails of our lives?

    What is this stillness;
    These doldrums of our souls?
    Where are we?

    Help me, my love...
    To kindle a breeze that will
    Carry us away

    Into another sunset...
    Another sunrise on horizon
    colored in love...



    Marcus Lewis
    7/08/2009

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    jimmymc600 commented on Doldrums

    08-24-2009

    Marcus, you did more with sailing than I ever did with golf. Beautiful poem, expressive, wanting, caring, seeking, sharing, passion, it's got it all!
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    Lolee commented on Doldrums

    07-28-2009

    We must trust in the Lord to lead us. Sometimes it's in places we would rather not be, and this is when we wait on him. He says having done all, then to stand. Just wait... the soft winds of love will whip up a refreshing breeze to sustain! This was beautiful....always a ten.
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    UnworthyFather

    07/28/2009

    Thank you, Lolee. Your insight and kind words mean so much. Marcus

    nightsky commented on Doldrums

    07-28-2009

    This is so beautiful, so tender...I imagine the couple lying together on the deck of the boat, his arms around her from behnd.
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    UnworthyFather

    07/28/2009

    Thank you, Nightsky. That is just as I pictured them when I wrote this. Marcus

    tenderpoison commented on Doldrums

    07-23-2009

    sounds like you two need a romantic get-away..alone! NO KIDS! make it happen Dad...great metaphor and wonderful phrasing as usual...I loved it. 10
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    UnworthyFather

    07/23/2009

    Thank you very much, Tender. We have something in the works...lol. Thanks for your support and kind words. Marcus

    ginga commented on Doldrums

    07-19-2009

    A metaphorical lullaby I believe you have written here and it persuades the one you're with in a very sensual way. Lovely 3 lined stanzas about the sea. The fact that you reveal the ailing relationship in such a tender way gives the reader hope that all will be mended. Very heartfelt. 10 Ginga
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    UnworthyFather

    07/19/2009

    Thank you very much, Ginga. You have such deep insight that I am left in awe. Thank you, ma'am.

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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